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課題:中学生の学習意欲向上のためにあなたは、どのように取り組みますか。方策も含めて150字前後で述べよ。

Some students think why they have to study or studying is not interesting.It leads to student's low learning motivation.I would like to improve student's learning motivation by two methods as followed.
The first method is linking learning contents with the things what they are interested in. I think almost all people can not like the things that they are not interested in.Therefore, in my lesson, I would like to teach English words linking with anime's character's name or song's lyrics which students like.
The second one is praising the students.The students who is low learning motivation think that they are not good at studying.So I would like to cultivate their confidence to praise them emphatically when they could solve simple question that I gave.
Students have each reasons why they are low learning motivation.Therefore I will make student's learning motivation improve under understanding their contexts.

いくらかの生徒がなぜ勉強しなければいけないのか。や勉強はつまらないという理由から学習意欲の低下が起こっている。私は、以下の二つの方法によりこれを向上させたい。
一つめは、学習内容と生徒が興味のあるものを結びつけることである。ほとんどの人々が興味のない物は好きになれないと思うからである。それゆえ、私は英語の授業の中で英単語と生徒の興味のあるアニメのキャラクターや、歌詞を結びつけて教えたい。
二つめの方法は、褒めることである。学習意欲の低い生徒は、自分達は勉強が苦手だと思っているので、私が与えた簡単な問題に応えることができたときはしっかり褒めたい。
生徒の学習意欲の低下には各々の理由がある。ゆえに私は、その理由を理解した上で生徒の学習意欲をあげたい。

回答No.1

cbm51901 · ベストアンサー

WHY DO some students LOSE INTEREST IN STUDYING? OR THAT THEY think THEY ARE FORCED TO STUDY? SUCH students SHOW low motivation TOWARDS LEARNING. I would like to HEIGHTEN students’ learning motivation by two methods as followS:

The first method is linking learning contents with the things THAT the STUDENTS are interested in. Most people DO NOT TAKE A LIKING to things that they are not interested in. Therefore, in my lesson, I would RELATE THE English words with ANIMATION characters or song lyrics which students like.
The second APPROACH is TO praise students. Students WITH low learning motivation think that they are not good at studying. So I would cultivate their confidence BY praising them emphatically IF they WERE TO solve simple PROBLEMS that I give.
EVERY student has HIS OR HER OWN reason why HE OR SHE LACKS motivation TO LEARN. Therefore I will ENHANCE students' learning motivation BY FIRST understanding their BACKGROUND.

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