Advantages and Disadvantages of School Uniforms

  • Find out the advantages and disadvantages of requiring school uniforms.
  • Learn about the impact of school uniforms on students' sense of individuality and freedom of expression.
  • Discover how school uniforms can provide economic equality among students.
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英作文の添削お願いします! 指定語数は80語なんですが、本番では100語なので100語で設定して書きました。 テーマは、制服着用の長所と短所です。 ヨロシクお願いします! Some schools are requring school niforms ,but others are not. Each of them has disadvantage and advantage.Now,I would like to mention these two things. First,disadvantage of requring school niforms is that they can not develop their sense of uniquness or individuality .And their school are specified by other people when they do not want to be. Second,the advantage of wearing school uniforms is that they do not have to choose which clothing to put on, and the students who can not afford to buy it would not suffer from choosing cloyhes. Therefore,because school uniforms have disadvantages and advantage as above things,we must not think light of the meanings of requring school uniforms.

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(1)Some schools are requring school niforms ,but others are not. Each of them has disadvantage and advantage.Now,I would like to mention these two things. (2)First,disadvantage of requring school niforms is that they can not develop their sense of uniquness or individuality .And their school are specified by other people when they do not want to be. (2)Second,the advantage of wearing school uniforms is that they do not have to choose which clothing to put on, and (3)the students who can not afford to buy it would not suffer from choosing cloyhes. Therefore,because school uniforms have disadvantages and advantage as above things,(4)(6)we must not think (5)light of the meanings of requring school uniforms. (1)Some ~, others ~「~なものもあれば、~のものもある。」という決まった表現なので、butは不要です。-1 (2)First Second・・・という箇条書きもいいかもしれませんが、それよりも「利点と欠点」という対比構造を分かりやすくするべきです。つまり、対比構造に箇条書きは不向きです。たとえば、「the former, the latter」「前者、後者」などのように書くのもいいですし、「On the other hand」「他方では」という風に書くとbetter!まぁ、減点にはしませんが、今後は対比構造の場合はこれらを使いましょう。 (3)厳しめにいきます。前文で「服を選ぶ必要性がない」ということを言っているのに、後の文でも同じことを言っています。また、「cannot afford to V」というのは「(金銭的に)余裕がない」というニュアンスで使われるのが一般的です。なので、「金銭的に服を買う余裕がない生徒は服を選ぶのに苦しまない」だと、主語と述語の関係がばらばらです。「金銭的に服を買う余裕がない生徒でも、制服を着用すれば、服を買うお金に困らない」という表現の方が説得力があります。-3。ここは厳しめにいかせてもらいました。 (4)表現が強すぎ。「must not」というのは「~してはいけない」という「禁止」の意味を持ちます。「禁止」の表現を使うには、この内容では具体性がかけているので適切ではありません。「should」や「have to」の方がいいでしょう。-2 (5)意味が不明です。確かに「light」というのは「形容詞」を伴って「観点」という意味がありますが、ここでは不適切。おそらく「意味の明快さ」をあらわしたかったのでしょうが、それでもこの表現は違います。「light」の明るいというのは、基本「電気などの明るさ」をいいます。「部屋の明るさ」とかね。「意味の明るさ」とは別物です。その場合には、「clear」形容詞で「明瞭な」などでもいいですし、名詞にしたいなら「definition」(明確)などのほうが適切です。まっ、「clear meaning」が一番良いかもしれませんね。-2 (6)これは結論にいたるまでのプロセスと、結論が合致していない点でつけさせていただきました。問題では「考えてはいけない」ということまで述べろとは言っていません。あくまで「征服の着用の利点、欠点」だけを書けばいいのです。また、中でも「利点」と「欠点」しか述べていないのに、「考えちゃだめだよ!」と結びつく根拠が分かりません。何か意図があるのでしょうが、こちらには伝わりませんでした。単純に「制服着用は二つのポイントがあるんだ!」で終わりにしても大丈夫です。-5 <全体批評> そうですね・・・12/25点ってところでしょうか?おしい!目標点は「17/25点」ってところです。特に(6)であげたポイントは気をつけましょう。構造自体はすばらしいので、後はところどころ直して本番に臨んでくださいね。



とても分かりやすくありがとうございます! 点数までつけてくれたから、どの程度できているのか理解しやすかったです! 本当にありがとうございます!


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