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How to Ensure Food Safety: A Comprehensive Approach

  • Food safety has become a pressing issue in today's society, and it is crucial for everyone to pay attention to what they eat.
  • Living alone poses challenges in maintaining a healthy diet, as convenience store meals often lack nutritional value and contain harmful additives.
  • To address this issue, society should encourage convenience stores to sell more nutritious and safe food options, ensuring that individuals can make healthy choices even when they are busy or living alone.


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Today, the problems of food quality and safety have been in the news more [often] than before.<普通数の意識より頻度として意識されます.ニュースの内容について触れることで後の解決策につなぐヒントとなります.たとえば「食べ過ぎ」「浪費・無駄遣い」など.> As (you know,) eating is one of the most important habits in daily life, (so) I care about what I eat every day. Because I live with my family, my mother [and](or) I<正直にプライベートを明かす必要はありません.書きやすいようにつなげましょう.> can cook by [ourselves](her or myself). Thus, [we](I) can (eat)[choose] healthy food such as f[r](l)esh vegetables, fruits, meat and fish [for cooking].<eatの目的語がfresh vegetablesやfresh meatになるとウサギやライオンと同じですよ.> However, if I have to live alone, I should sometimes buy [prepared food](the meal) at [a](the) convenience store when I am busy and unable to cook.<mealは食事foodは食品> [And I am sure](In addition), this is the problem for people who live alone. Although a lot of convenience store[s] stand everywhere in (the city)[cities], most (of meals)[food] they sell are not [always] healthy, like high-calorie[d], salty, or including (high levels)[lots] of chemicals. <most of the... / most... / almost all the...間違えやすい>Eating (these)[such] food(s) (usually)[may] harm their health.<食の選択を問題点にすると個人の問題になるので難しそう.> (I suggest that society should make the convenience stores sell more healthy food if they make sure that we all eat good and healthy food.)<theyがsocietyなのかsotresか迷います.好みも含めて,カロリーや塩分は消費者が選ぶべきものだとすれば,現状の問題点が指摘されていないので解決策として未消化です.答えはたぶん食に対する消費者の教育にあるかと思いますがどうでしょう.> When they [do?] so, (even)[all the] people who live [with] themselves will be able to eat [food] safe(ty) and (be) more healthy.(183words) <素直に思いついたとおり文章を書けた点は評価しますが,「社会はどう関わるべきか」という課題があるので,この点から問題点,改善点を考えていった方が最後に悩まずにすんだと思います.結論があれば書きやすいものです.>



毎回丁寧に添削していただき本当にありがとうございます(*´∀`*) fleshとfreshの違い、御指摘いただくまで全く知りませんでした・・・ 論理展開の仕方もたいへん具体的でわかりやすいです(´;ω;`) 次から英作文を書くときにはアドバイス頂いた点に注意して 筋の通ったものになるよう意識してみます!



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    「Social statusとHealthを関連させて食について論じなさい」 字数指定はありませんが、過去の問題から推測すると少なくとも100字は必要だと思います。 点数を25点満点でつけて頂きたいです。 よろしくお願いします。  (1)It is important to consider both social status and Health. This is why there are many food problems such as unbalanced nutrition, eating without measure, and food shortage yet to be resolved.  (2)There are, for example, my friends who eat many instsnt foods almost everyday. One of my friends had had a serious stomachache for three monthes. This desease was due to overeating instant foods. It is true that the instant foods are low expense, but they lack in nutrition.  (3)Arother example is overeating and foodshortage. Former and later are related with each other. I have watched a very fat people and small, poor children who are not able to eat enough foods on TV. I often think the part of which people who eat to excess eat should be given to poor people.  (4)There are other many problems yet be resolved. We shoud take food problems like above exampleks into considering .

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    I used to do YOGA every day a couple of years ago, so my body was pretty flexible and fit. I was healthy. However I was getting less interested doing YOGA. Instead I started going jogging three days a week. About the same time, I started to have too much appetite. I could not stop eating until I get full in every meal. In spite of I do jogging, I ended up getting so much weight and to have big tummy. I will DO brush up on YOGA for my body and I am going to eat less little by little.

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    「竹を食べるというと変に聞こえますが、芽生えをやわらかくして煮て食べるのです。」 と説明すると、ようやく納得のいった顔をした。 Though it may sound strange to eat baboo, it means you eat some parts of them in which new life are brought about, after boil and make them soft. When I expained like this, they put on a convinced face. 読んでいただけたらわかると思いますが、芽生えに大変苦労しています。 10分程悩んだ結果がこのざまです、budがでてきませんでした・・・。 回答よろしくおねがいします。

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    こんにちは! ついさきほど、住みたい国を自由に選びその理由を述べるというテーマの英作文をしました。 もし、不自然な点、明らかにおかしい点などがありましたらお教えくださいm(__)m I want to live in Hawaii. When my family and I visited there 5 years ago, we got a lot of fun. I spended most of times swimming in the sea. The sea was so clear that there were many kinds of fish. I think it's very nice to be able to swim there every day. Besides, all foods I ate in Hawaii were very delicious. I want to eat dishes which we ate at a restaurant once again. I think living in Hawaii is great. So I chose Hawaii.

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    テーマはここ数年のニュースで話題になったものというものです。 I was interested in the news which the age of adult should be lowered to eighteen years old. I agree with this idea. Young people these days are overprotected. They can't know anything about the world. It is true that people in their teens still aren't mentally and physically mature. Many teenager don't have a full time job, live with their parents and depend on their parents, However, this is the reason why the age of adult should be lowered. Someday, they will have to live by their own. If they have to be responsible to everything they do, they will become aware that they should be independent. They would also appreciate their parents. よろしくおねがいします。

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    問い:Do you like living where you live now,or would you rather live somewhere else in Japan or in the world? Why? Answer these questions as completely as you can. Use detail. Make us see and hear and smell and touch the place you are in ,or the place you imagine. Write in English on your answer sheet. I like living where I live now. I live in Gifu.there are two good reason why I like living in Gifu. First of all, there is good environment for living. Urban like Tokyo ,it is convenient for us to live in. However, there are some environmental problems such as air pollution and water pollution and etc. In contrast, Gihu is clean air and water. Moreover, there is few environmental problems. It is confortable for us to live there. Second, Gihu is a easygoing place. Urban are busy place. I like easygoing place better than busy place because I would like to act my own pace. I feel that people who live in urban are always busy and hurry. I do not want to disturb my own pace. That is all reason I want to live in Gifu

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    英作文の添削です 誤字訂正箇所や採点を100点基準でお願いします。 ちなみに仮定法をつかっているのは指定条件下にあるので気にしないで下さい…m(__)m If I became a worker , I woul d live in my home by myself, because to live with only myself is a variety of merits. Of course, with my family I can save a lot of money : in fact It costs a lo t of money to live by myself . However,with by myself I would be free to use the time for myself such as shopping ,reading .,relaxing...and so on. I would also can independent of my family and grow as human . For example, I would try to make some food and manage to get earnings . On the other hand, I would freely can't use the time if I lived with my family, because my parents worry about me when I be in out till being late at night. Therefore, I suggest that I choose to live with only myself. この質問を補足する

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    自由英作文の添削をお願いします テーマ:A large earthquake event is expected in the Tokai area in the near future. Describe the preparations you would make in anticipation of such a disaster. If a disastrous earthquake were to occur while you were studing at this university, what would you do? 条件:3パラグラフ以上、150字以上、序論・本論・結論が明確であること   It is often said that a large earthquake occurs in the Tokai area in the near future. As I experienced the large earthquake in the Tohoku area the other day, I am very nervous about such disasters and highly motivated to prepare them. Through my experience, you should always prepare some degree of water and prepared food for a disastrous earthquake. It is because even a convenience store is closed just after a large earthquake. Next, if a disastrous earthquake were to occur while I were studying at this university, it would expected that many people are in panic. I know being in panic lead a second disaster. Thus, I would let students around me keep calm down, get out of this university, and move to safety area like play ground. After doing this, I would offer the leader’s instruction. This would make damages of a disaster as less as possible. Although you are often told to prepare a large disaster, you may do not know how to prepare for it. Preparing water and prepared food is necessary, of course, but it is more important that you talk about what would you do when a disastrous earthquake were to occur with people around you in daily life in advance. I believe that many people always imagine this may lessen the serious damages.(222words) 本日は英語の試験時間である90分の最初に英作文を書きはじめました(いつもは最後でした) 時間は35分近くかかってしまいましたが、自分としてはいつもの作文より筋がとおっているかな、と思っています。 添削して頂く際、この問題の配点を100点として、何点くらいの評価か、回答者様の主観でかまいませんので評価して頂けたらありがたいです。 よろしくお願いいたします。