If I could go back in time, I would choose my elementary school days
- If I could go back to a certain day, I would choose to go back to my elementary school days. In those days, I was not positive and didn't study hard. I also missed out on playing with my friends. Looking back, I realize that I should have challenged myself more and made more friends. Experiences and friendships are crucial in life as they make us smarter and braver.
- If given the opportunity to return to a specific moment, I would opt for my elementary school days. During that time, I lacked positivity and didn't put enough effort into my studies. Additionally, I didn't fully engage in playing with my friends. Reflecting on this, I now understand the importance of taking risks and cultivating meaningful relationships. Both experiences and friendships greatly contribute to personal growth and development.
- If I could turn back time, I would go back to my elementary school days. Back then, I had a negative mindset and neglected my studies. I also missed out on valuable playtime with my friends. Looking back, I realize the significance of pushing myself out of my comfort zone and forming connections with others. Experiences and friendships shape us into better individuals, providing us with wisdom and support throughout our lives.
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テーマは「今までの人生で過去のある特定の時点に戻れるとしたら、あなたはどの時点に戻り、何をしたいか。」 字数は80字前後で、第一文をifで始め、具体的に書くこと。 If I were to go back to a certain day, I would go back in my elementary school days. In those days, I was not positive and did not study hard,play with my friends. I should have challenged various things and made friends with many people. This is because many experiences make me clever and courageous, and the more friends I have, the more they help me. I think experiences and friends are by far the most important in life. 計82words 文法で間違っている箇所と文章の展開の仕方が論理的かどうか指摘して頂けると助かります^^ あと、第2文の並列構造ですが、「 , play～」でつなげ方は問題ないでしょうか？ 「and play～」だとandが2回連続するので、カンマにしたのですが。 では、よろしくお願いします！
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ご無沙汰でした、あれからずいぶん上手くなっていらっしゃいます、より具体的に書きたいですよね、でも、これ位でもいいのかな。 If given such chance to travel back to a certain day, I wish I could go back to my elementary school days. I was then less active, studying not hard and playing not often with my friends. I should have been more positive to study and play with more friends. Now I know such experiences could have made me more positive to challenge new things. Since then I changed myself to make more and more friends, I learn much from them. 81 words
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If I were to go back to a certain day, I would go back in my elementary school days. In those days, I was not positive and did not study hard, play with friends. I should have tried to do various things and made friends with. This is because many experiences make me smart and courageous and the more friends I have, the more they help me. I think experiences and friends are by far the most important in life. (80 words) としてみました。challengeが日本語で言うチャレンジするでないのでtry、friends with many peopleが冗長、andの使い方を少し変えただけです。
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