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50語で題は『学生生活であなたがしたい事』です(>_<)!!  英文はこちらです→   I want to make friends with many people. It is because I was too shy to talk with the strangers. Therefor, I didn't have much friends. It is obvious I come to talk with strangers possibility more than now and became intimate with a lot of people. 間違い、改善点など指摘してもらえると、ありがたいです^^

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I want to make friends with many people. Because I have been too shy to talk with the strangers, so I couldn't make friends a lot before. If I can come to talk with strangers more frequent than ever before I'll be intimate with a lot of people, I believe. (50 words)

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I have been too shy to talk with the strangers 現在完了形を使うのを忘れてました(>_<) とても参考になりました^^ またお願いします(>_<) thank you very much.

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