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妥当な英作文への修正お願いします。

Ineed to improve my communication skills. because,I am not good at express skills. after evening, I bought a book that title was social psychology of bad communication. I haven't discoverd that another person said a part of my foolish behavior. So, I decide that I don't bother all of my field of my family,co-worker,friends. I wish happiness all of my relative people,and achivement my goal in life. 文法の間違いがあり、うまくまとめきれてないんですが、よろしくお願いします。

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I have to improove my communication skill, because I am not good at expressing. I bought a book titled as Social Psychology of Bad Comminication, tonight. I didn't notice my foolish behavior which was pointed out by somebady. So I decided that I will not bother anybody around me such as ... I wish all of your happiness and achievment of my goal in my life. 一応、文法的に正しく直しました。参考にしてください。 もし英語を勉強するのであれば、5構文を理解してください。 現状は単語を並べているだけで文章になってません。

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ありがとうございます。 只今、英語の勉強を始めて1ヶ月です。 もう一度5構文から復習します。 大変参考になります。

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