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何度もすいません。 受験が迫りあせっていて添削を依頼させていただことが多いと思うのですが もしよろしければ些細な点でも指摘いただけると助かります テーマ 日本について外国人に何か自由に説明してください(100~150) There is a lot of great beautiful nature in Japan. For example, it has Mt.Fuji , which is very famous for its height. It is the highest mountain in Japan, so a lot of foreign tourists come to japan in order to see it. It is also famous for its beauty. Last summer I went sightseeing in Yamanasi. When I took a look at Mt.Fuji, I was overwhelmed by its beuauty. Probably you may not be able to understamd how great it was, so I recommend that you see it. In addition, you can climb it. If you have conffidence in your physical strength, you should have a try. It is said the view from the top is beyond description.


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こんにちは。日本の自然について、富士山を挙げている、ということで、2行目の文章でもう少し富士山の美しさを書いてみるといいと思います。また、2行目の文章は山の高さと自然の美しさ、というのが関連性がないのと、富士山が日本で一番高い山だから外国人が見に来るのか、という疑問があります。 Web Japanという外国人向けの日本紹介サイトで富士山の項目を見ると、四季だけでなく時間帯によっても富士山の風景が異なり、それが一番魅了するものだろう、という内容が書かれています。 http://web-japan.org/atlas/nature/nature_fr.html 例えば2番目にそのような内容を入れます。 One of the good examples is Mt. Fuji, the highest mountain in Japan. It has scenic beauty, and its views change in each season and even during a day. These different views may attract a lot of foreign tourists to see it. そして Last summer...の文では、Yamanashi の説明を入れます。日本では周知のことですが、外国人にはYamanashiが富士山とどのような関係があるのか、説明する必要があります。 Last summer I went sightseeing in Yamanashi, the southern border of which Mt. Fuji is located. I was overwhelmed by its beauty. Seeing is believing. You may not realize how beautiful it is. I recommend you to enjoy its view with your own eyes. 後は、山に登れる夏場に登ってみるのもいい・・・と続けるといいと思います。



指摘ありがとうございます! 言われてみるとやはり論理性に欠けていることにきづきました 自分では気づかない間違いに気づくことができ ほんとうにありがたいです!!! 参考サイトまでもありがとうございます!! ミスのなく減点されない英作をめざしてがんばります!

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こんにちは 全体的には、主旨もすっきりしていて読みやすい文章だと思います。 もう少し簡単な構文で書くとなおよいと思います。 内容についてですが、これですと日本の紹介と言うよりは富士山の紹介のような感じがするので、富士山を例に出しながら、日本の自然の美しさはこういう特徴がある、とかいう展開に出来るとなおよいのではないかと思います



指摘ありがとうございます! 内容面にも気をつけて練習を積んでいこうと思います!

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X conffidence O confidence X understamd O understand In addition, you can climb it. 問題ないと思うのですが、ここでIn additionというのもやや堅苦しいかも? You can also? まぁそんなことないか(^^;)



ありがとうございます!! 堅苦しい表現なんですか! 気をつけたいとおもいます!!


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