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自由英作文の添削をして下さい。

自由英作文の添削をして下さい。 辞書等使わずに書いたのでおかしな部分は多々あるかと思いますが、よろしくお願いします。 問)あなたの住んでいる町に産業廃棄物処理施設が建設されることになりました。そこで近隣の住民から反対運動が起きています。あなた自身はこの計画についてどう思いますか。あなたの意見を100語程度の英語でまとめなさい。 I disagree with the plan making an industrial waste disposal facility. I have two reasons. First,what you make this facility will destroy environment because you cut trees and close the sea to get a wide ground for it. Second,if you make it,industrial waste will not reduce. It is true that such a disposal facility may be useful,but people don't think that they have to decrease industrial waste because there is a disposal facility. It is more important to think a plan which reduce industrial waste and put it into practice than to make an industrial waste disposal facility. (102語)

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  • 回答No.2

大変失礼いたしました。文法的に間違っている箇所はもうすでに変更しておきましたのでそこを読み比べて下さい。

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すみません!気が付きませんでした(><;) 添削してくださってありがとうございました!

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I disagree with the plan to make an industrial waste disposal facility. I have two reasons. First,when you make this facility, this will destroy the environment because you cut trees and close the sea to get a wide ground for it. Second,if you make it,industrial waste will not be reduced. It is true that such a disposal facility may be useful,but people do not think that they have to decrease industrial waste because there is a disposal facility. It is more important to think of a plan which will reduce the industrial waste and put it into practice than to make an industrial waste disposal facility. 正式文章で胆略系を使うと失礼、または丁寧さが失われますので気をつけましょう。

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回答ありがとうございます。 すみません、気をつけます…。 よろしければ具体的に何処を直せばよいのか教えてくださいませんか?(>_<)

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