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大学受験で自由英作文がある。塾にも通えず先生にも添削を断られた。助言をください。

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  • 大学受験で自由英作文があるため、塾に通えず先生にも添削を断られてしまった。こちらで助言をお願いしたい。
  • 医学部を卒業した後、地域の医師となるべきかどうかについての私の意見は、初任地の地域で数年間の義務的な勤務を行うべきだと思っている。
  • 地方の医師は都市部の医師よりも地域の人々との良好な関係を築くことができる。また、地方の医師不足により、病気の人々が治療を受けられない状況も多く、これを解消するためにも新卒の医師を地方に派遣すべきだ。

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I agree with the idea that newly graduated doctors from this university should be sent to rural areas in this prefecture for several years of compulsory service. Needless to say, doctors can establish better relationship with people living in rural areas than in urban areas. Of course, there are so many doctors and patients in urban areas that the newly graduated doctor is able to acquire latest technology by them or see various kinds of patients there. However, since the population is less dense in rural areas, the doctor can perform almost similar treatments everywhere. What is more, saving people's lives is the most important thing for a doctor. Many rural areas are suffering from shortage of trained doctors and sick people often do not have a chance to be seen by a doctor and they might die premature deaths. For these reasons, I suggest that newly graduated doctors be sent to areas where there is a shortage of doctors and where there is a chance to establish mutual trust with local residents.    とも。原文でも十分通じる文ですよ。

Rina1717
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ありがとうございます! 第二パラグラフの後半の表現、大変参考になりました。 同じことを言い換える表現をSPS700さんのようにうまくできるようになりたいです。。。

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