Capital punishment debate: Why it should be abolished
- The debate on capital punishment, or the death penalty, is a contentious issue in the field of human rights.
- While some argue in favor of the death penalty, there are strong reasons to support its abolition.
- Capital punishment does not effectively prevent crimes, and it may lead to irreversible mistakes.
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死刑制度と貴方の意見について述べなさい。 という課題です よろしくお願いします。 Capital punishment debate I disagree with capital punishment and we had better repeal it. Firstly, what is Capital punishment? it has a long history and now capital punishment debate is one of the human rights issues. Some people agree with death penalty and others disagree with it. And some countries adopt death penalty, such as, Japan, China, Iran, and so on. In Europe, Belarus is only country that adopt death penalty and this country does not belong to EU because she embraces death penalty. Thus this problem is so difficult for human being to solve. Death penalty dose not prevents felonious crimes very much. We often hear the idea that death penalty stop offender killing other people. However, it is not exactly. According to the statistics of murder case in the United States, the number of the murder case in the State which adopts the penalty is larger than that doesn’t adopt it. Also according to a research, in a country where there is the penalty, after they abolished the penalty, the number of murder did not change dramatically. Moreover, a country where there is not the penalty, after they started the penalty, the number did not change hard, either. Thus we can say that death penalty may not have a power to prevent crimes. In spite of these, why there is capital punishment? Is there any meaning that we kill the people who kill other? Maybe not. Offenders should pay for the victims and rehabilitate no matter how long it takes, so it is not good that not only victims but offenders are killed. As the Bible says, we should ‘condemn the offense, but pity the offender.’ It may cause the case where people who kill nobody are killed as a dearth penalty on a false charge. Indeed, there are many cases like this in the world. In Japan, it is not about death penalty, there are, too. In other word, it is an unmistakable murder. However, no one is bad― it is the death penalty that is not good. In conclusion, death penalty has a little benefit and may lead terrible mistakes. And the Law makes offenders not kill but rehabilitate. Therefore I disagree with death penalty and we had better abolish it.
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Capital punishment debate タイトル必要なんですか？付けるなら、エッセイの中の意見を1文でまとめた文にしましょう。それに、反対意見しか述べないのなら、debateではないですし、debateのことを書いてるわけではないので、debateとは書かないほうが良いでしょう。例えば、"Why Death Penalty Should Be Abolished"とか"Why I Oppose The Death Penalty"とか。 I disagree with capital punishment and we had better repeal it. 1文だけではパラグラフにしない。下のパラグラフと別にするなら、もっと書く。そして、weとは誰？日本？人類？それにwe had betterって誰を脅迫してるんですか？ Firstly, what is Capital punishment? it has a long history and now capital punishment debate is one of the human rights issues. Some people agree with death penalty and others disagree with it. And some countries adopt death penalty, such as, Japan, China, Iran, and so on. In Europe, Belarus is only country that adopt death penalty and this country does not belong to EU because she embraces death penalty. Thus this problem is so difficult for human being to solve. 英語以前に論点として意味が不明。 「死刑とは何か？」ほうほう、死刑のことをどうやって説明してくれるのかな？ 「昔から、執行されていて、人権問題である。」ん。。。説明はどうなった？まあ、とにかく、どう問題なのかを説明してくれるのかな？ 「死刑に賛成する人もいれば、反対する人もいる。」当たり前でしょう。だから何？説明は？ 「死刑執行する国もあれば、禁止した国もある。」だから何？説明は？ 「べラルースが死刑執行しているからEUに入れない。だからこの問題は人間にとって難しい」説明は？これでパラグラフ終わり？ 論点、文法、単語などなど直す部分が多すぎて添削自体がエッセイの数倍の長さになりそうなので、残りは直しませんが、あと一つだけ。 4パラグラフ目で何故聖書のquoteをしているのかが不明。書き方からして、「聖書に～～書いてあるんだし、そうしましょう」って意味にとれます。宗教もちこんできた時点でロジカルなargumentはできません。その文を正当化するためにもっと書くなら別ですが。
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こんにちは、ちょっと長くて全部を直すつもりありませんが、ちょっとだけ手伝ってあげます。 なによりも基本的な文法間違いが多いです。内容は分かりづらいではないが文法的にあっていない所が多いです。 一番大きな問題は冠詞が正しく使われていません。冠詞をすこし復習してからほとんどの間違いを直せると思います。 もうひとつのはＳＶＯの基本をまもることです。日本語とちがって冠詞などで単語を指定しないと名詞ではない。Ｂｏｏｋでも本という意味ではなくてＢｏｏｋしてという意味になってしまいますので本でしたらＡ ｂｏｏｋ、共通認識のある本、つまり前言った本などの場合はＴｈｅ ｂｏok. I go Japanなどの場合もＳＶＯの形で私が日本を行かすというニュアンスが出てしまうが間違ってて意味がわかりづらいです。ＳＶＯの形を破るにＩ ｇｏ ｔｏ ＪａｐａｎのＴＯを入れることで文法的にまったく違う文書になります。
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