英語日記２４ 死刑制度

質問

今回も文法がわからんとこはしらべずにしたので間違いが多いとおもいます！！！

すいませんが最近英語力のライティングをあげようと英作文をまいにち書くようにしてます。
レベルのひくい英作文ではずかしいのですが。できれば文法や細かい間違いを指摘して頂けると幸いです

What do you think of a idea the death penalty.
There are many countries adopt the death penalty. Japan is one of them.
I want to just ask you that you think you agree with this system??
I guess that there are many opinion of this system.
victim`s family probably hope that the murder is going to die, but how about murder`s family?? They think feel too bad when they hear their son going to die, even if he is murder.
This is my opinion, so please don’t hurt your feeling even if hear my opinion.
I think death penalty is also one of crimes. Please thinking about it simply.
Were you taught the thing that you shouldn’t revenge just because you feel disgusting. It has a in consistency, doesn’t it??

回答No.2

cbm51910 · ベストアンサー

ライティングの力をあげるための努力は高く評価しますが、今回は気を付ければ防げた筈の凡ミスが多過ぎです。例えば英語の文章において Question Mark (?) は一つで足ります。単純な事ですがこうしたところに注意を払う事も重要です。

What do you think of a idea the death penalty.
[What do you think of the death penalty?]
→ "What do you think" と訊いているので "of an idea" は不要です。「考える」こと自体が頭の中で「アイディアを転がす」ことだからです。因みに、idea の前の不定冠詞は a ではなく、an です。

There are many countries adopt the death penalty. Japan is one of them.
[There are many countries that adopt death penalty. Japan is one of them.]
→ 接続詞 "that" が抜けています。

I want to just ask you that you think you agree with this system??
[I want to just ask you whether or not you agree with the system.]
→ "whether or not (you agree)" ＝ 「（同意）かどうか」
→ 疑問文ではないので、"?" は不要です。

I guess that there are many opinion of this system.
[I guess there are many views on death penalty.]
→ ここでは "that" を省いても構いません。文意が明瞭なので。

victim`s family probably hope that the murder is going to die, but how about murder`s family??
[Victims' families probably want the murderers dead, but what about the murderers' families?]
→ 被害者一般の家族ということで、複数にしています（Victims' families）。
→ 殺人犯も複数にして一般化しています。"murder" は「殺人」、「殺人犯」は "murderer" です。

They think feel too bad when they hear their son going to die, even if he is murder.
[Even if their son is a murderer, the parents will be grieved if they were to be told that their son is to be executed. ]
→ 「たとえ自分の息子が殺人者であっても」は最初にもってきた方がインパクトがあります。
→ ただ「死ぬ」のではなく「死刑に処される」ので、"to be executed."
→ "grieved" ＝ 「悲嘆に暮れる」

This is my opinion, so please don’t hurt your feeling even if hear my opinion.
[In my personal opinion,]
→ 「私の個人的な見解ですが、」で足ります。

I think death penalty is also one of crimes. Please thinking about it simply.
[I think capital punishment is a crime in itself. It is as simple as that.]
→ "death penalty" が何度も出てくるので、違う言葉 "capital punishment" を使用。
→ "is a crime in itself." 「それ自体が罪である。」

Were you taught the thing that you shouldn’t revenge just because you feel disgusting. It has a in consistency, doesn’t it??
[Were you not taught that you should not revenge eye for an eye?]
→ "eye for an eye" ＝ 「目には目を」

What do you think of the death penalty?
There are many countries that adopt death penalty. Japan is one of them.
I want to just ask you whether or not you agree with the system.
I guess there are many views on death penalty.
Victims' families probably want the murderers dead, but what about the murderers' families?
Even if their son is a murderer, the parents will be grieved if they were to be told that their son is to be executed.
In my personal opinion, I think capital punishment is a crime in itself. It is as simple as that.
Were you not taught that you should not revenge eye for an eye?

お礼

長い回答ありがとうございます。
これからもよろしくおねがいします。

回答No.1

Ensenada

荒捜しだけです。
victim’s → Victim’s
文頭は大文字。

Victim、murder、familyはもしかして複数形のほうがいいかもしれないけど、わからない。他の人の回答を待ってください。

even if he is murder. → 単数形なら a murder. 複数形なら they are murders.

Please thinking about it simply.
→ Please think about it simply. Please の後は動詞の原形

お礼

ありがとう！！

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