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The Most Impressing Present in My Life: A Watch

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  • Discover the most impressing present in my life: a watch that my father gave me when I passed the exam to enter high school. Learn about the sentimental value it holds for my father and the surprising moment when he gifted it to me.
  • Explore the significance of the watch gifted to me by my father when I passed my high school entrance exam. Despite having received a new watch from my mother and sister, my father's attachment to this old watch made it a truly meaningful and surprising gift.
  • Delve into the story of the watch that holds immense sentimental value in my life. From my father's continuous use of it to the surprising moment when he passed it on to me, this watch symbolizes the love and connection within our family.

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The most memorable gift in my life is a watch that my father gave to me when I passed the high school entrance exam. He has used the watch since before I was born, and he never put it away even when he was given a new one by my mother and sister. I think the watch is very important for him. So, I was very surprised and hesitated to receive it when he gave it to me. I however finally received it because he told me as smiling at me that he would use new one from my mother and sister. Althogh my very old watch and his new watch look very different, both are surely filled with love of our family. まず、同じフレーズの繰り返しが気になりました。 読者に幼い印象を与えますので、整理したり代名詞を使ったりしましょう。 文法的には、過去完了形を使うべきところもありましたが、上の修正案ではそれを使わずに書いてみました。 私も上の修正案に自信があるわけではなく、まだ改善の余地があるように感じていますが、参考にしてください。

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