英語日記２２ 日本の大学

質問

日本の大学
今回は日本の大学について書いてみました。
最近誰も回答してくれないのですが。英語のためがんばります。
実際僕も大学生の年齢なので、よく大学のことはわかるつもりです。　ちなみに２０です。

すいませんが最近英語力のライティングをあげようと英作文をまいにち書くようにしてます。
レベルのひくい英作文ではずかしいのですが。できれば文法や細かい間違いを指摘して頂けると幸いです。

I would like to talk about university in Japan.
It is said that university in Japan is difficult to enter it, but it is easy to graduate from your university. How about foreign universities are. In the USA, on the contrary, it is easy to enter a university and difficult to graduate　from it, so many student in the USA drop out from their university.
I have friends who are university student in Japan. This is in my opinion, I think that my friends who are university student don’t trend to study hard.
I am not criticizing them just because there are many temptations so many university students yield to temptation.
I think if I were a university student in Japan, I would not study hard. This is because I tend to puzzle from surrounding environment. However, I like people who are university student !!!

回答No.1

noname#183197 · ベストアンサー

＞I would like to talk about university in Japan.
university を universities

＞It is said that university in Japan is difficult to enter it, but it is easy to graduate from your university.
... universities in Japan is difficult to get into but easy to graduate (from).
※入学するは get into のほうがいいです。 enter は単に敷地内に入ることも意味します。it などの代名詞はここでは不要です。graduate の目的語は前の universities です。つまり universities in Japan を difficult to get into ... で修飾しています。

＞How about foreign universities are.
are はないほうがいいでしょう。

＞In the USA, on the contrary, it is easy to enter a university and difficult to graduate　from it, so many student in the USA drop out from their university.
... universities are easy to get into but difficult to graduate

＞I have friends who are university student in Japan.
who are university students と複数に

＞This is in my opinion, I think that my friends who are university student don’t trend to study hard.
I think my friends in universities don't tend to study hard.

＞I am not criticizing them just because there are many temptations [that] so many university students [would] yield to 【temptation】.
これも最後の temptation が不要。so many 以降はその前の temptations を修飾しています。

＞I think if I were a university student in Japan, I would not study hard. This is because I tend to puzzle from surrounding environment.
puzzle from がいまいちだと思いますので、 I would be much attracted to surrounding.. とすればいいでしょう。

＞However, I like people who are university student !!!
people who are... は、単に university students とすればいいでしょう。

お礼

ありがとうございます。