１２０語自由英作文添削をお願いいたします。
昨日これの賛成意見を書いたのですが（http://okwave.jp/qa/q6882559.html）、反対意見も書いてみました。
添削をお願いいたします。
志望は早稲田政経です。
一橋2003後期
English should be made an official language in japan.
I don't agree with this opinion. For one thing, Japanese language, which is called 'Hiragana' or 'Kanji' or 'Katakana' is one of the most important tools to understand Japanese culture. Throughout Japanese history, almost all the Japanese people have used it and almost all the books in Japan are written by it. If we stopped using it, we couldn't read these old books, which may include priceless Japanese history or policy. We don't live ourselves but we are influenced by and connect with ancestors. That is why, that we can't read old books and that we can't understand Japanese policy means that we can't really understand ourselves. To conclude, we have to keep using Japanese language to remain Japanese identity.
日本語は日本の文化を理解するための最も大事な道具のひとつである。
我々は自分たちだけでなく、過去と繋がって日本の精神を受け継いで生きている。
そのため、日本語が読めなくなることで、過去の文献が読めなくなり、日本の歴史や日本の精神を理解できなくなることは自分たち自信を正しく理解出来ないことにもつながる。
お礼
ありがとうございました！