添削をしてほしいです

質問

また、lab3 で行ったflexibility Testでは結果(rating)がneeds improveでした。
運動する機会が減り、ストレッチも行っていなかったため、体が柔なくない、ということは自分でもわかっていました。
体を柔らかくすることは様々なメリットがあります。good flexibilityは関節の健康に必要です。柔軟性を高めておくと、怪我や筋肉痛を予防することができます。また、多くの人が経験したことのある腰痛(Low back pain)のそれの改善にもつながります。
定期的に運動やストレッチを行い、これらの結果をもとに改善したいと思います。

⇨ Also, the rating of the flexibility test in lab 3 was "needs improve".
I knew that my body was not flexibility because my opportunity to exercise decreased and I did not do stretching.
There are a lot of various merits of flexibility your body.
Good flexibility is necessary for joint health.
It is possible to prevent injury and muscle pain to improve flexibility.
Moreover, it leads to improvements of low back pain that almost people have experienced.
I would like to improve based on these result to periodically exercise and stretching.

日本語に英語が混ざっていてややこしいかと思うのですが、こちらの英文を添削して欲しいです。
よろしくお願いします。

回答No.1

92128bwsd · ベストアンサー

＞Also, the rating of the flexibility test in lab 3 was "needs improve".
⇒ OKと思います。the rating はmy rating の方が良いです。他の言い方の例。
I've got "needs improve" at the flexibility test in lab 3.

＞I knew that my body was not flexibility because my opportunity to exercise decreased and I did not do stretching.
⇒ I recognize (that) my body is not flexible because my exercise opportunity has decreased and not done stretching (much).
言い方としては、because I lost opportunities to exercise often と言うのもあります。

> There are a lot of various merits of flexibility your body.
⇒ a lot of は単数形なので、there is。a lot of と various はくどいので繋げないほうが良いと思います。merits of であれば、merits of being flexible
There is a lot of merits (in various way) of being flexible on your body.

> Good flexibility is necessary for joint health.
⇒ Having good flexibility is necessary to keep my joints healthy.

> It is possible to prevent injury and muscle pain to improve flexibility.
⇒ I may be able to prevent injuries and muscle pains with the improved flexibility (flexibility improvement)

> Moreover, it leads to improvements of low back pain that almost people have experienced.
⇒ Moreover, the flexibility improvement will contribute to ease low back pain which many people are suffering.

> I would like to improve based on these result to periodically exercise and stretching.
⇒ Taking those result seriously, I will improve my ratings by periodical exercise and stretching.

お礼

my ratingなんですね。
a lot of とvariousは一緒に使わないのですね！
勉強になりました！
ありがとうございます。