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「Ｓｏｃｉａｌ ｓｔａｔｕｓとＨｅａｌｔｈを関連させて食について論じなさい」
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よろしくお願いします。
(1)It is important to consider both social status and Health. This is why there are many food problems such as unbalanced nutrition, eating without measure, and food shortage yet to be resolved.
(2)There are, for example, my friends who eat many instsnt foods almost everyday. One of my friends had had a serious stomachache for three monthes. This desease was due to overeating instant foods. It is true that the instant foods are low expense, but they lack in nutrition.
(3)Arother example is overeating and foodshortage. Former and later are related with each other. I have watched a very fat people and small, poor children who are not able to eat enough foods on TV. I often think the part of which people who eat to excess eat should be given to poor people.
(4)There are other many problems yet be resolved. We shoud take food problems like above exampleks into considering .
お礼
凄い表現を教えて頂きありがとうございました。 しっかり覚えて自分のものにいたします。 本当にありがとうございました。