Should Japanese Schools Follow Examples on Protecting Students' Privacy?
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Japanese schools should not follow the example of other schools in protecting students' privacy.
The rules in other schools do not openly state that teachers have the right to search a cell phone, which clearly violates students' privacy.
While it is acceptable for teachers to collect and keep phones when students cause problems, accessing the content of the phones is not acceptable.
英語の添削をお願いします
文法上のミスや点数なんか大体で教えて下さいm(._.)m
内容はある学校の規則にあなたは同意しますかしませんか、そしてそれは何故かという問題に対しての解答です
ある学校の具体的な規則はスルーして下さい。
I think in protecting students privacy, japanese school shouldn't follow the example of it .
in his 2010 article privasy at school "choices ahead'by sm Foane write," the rules do not openly state that the teachers have the right to search a cell phone. "
This clealy violates student's privacy.
Of course, it is right that the phones are only collected and kept by the teachers, when the students cause the problem.
But to see the content of the phones is no good.
Therefore, I can't agree with the examples.
★冒頭、規則に同意するか、しないか、即答えるべきです。 文末ではいけません。
I do not agree with these rules.とか。
★japanese → Japanese
example of itって?
rules という書き方をしたとしたら、それを受けて
Japanese schools should not follow them to protect students' privacy.
でよいと思います。
★なぜかしら小文字で始まる in his 2010
privasy → privacy
In his 2010 ariticle on privacy at school, "Choices Ahead" by sm Foan, he writes, "The rules do not openly state that the teachers have the right to search a cell phone."
ariticle → article
clealy → clearly
student's privacy → students' privacy
Of course, it is not wrong that the phones are collected and kept by the teachers, when the students have caused problems with them.
However, to see what is in side the phones is no good. Therefore, I can't agree with the rules.
6/10 点ですかね?