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質問

I think gambling should not be banned. If it is banned, some people living the revenue cannot life.
Certainly there is something dangerous in any point, I think it is not to ban.
As a result that it should be legalized and limit to gamble.
It depends you for gambling to how to use.

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回答No.1

KONEKO4 · ベストアンサー

I think gambling should not be banned.

If it WERE banned, some people RELYING ON the revenue GENERATED FROM GAMBLING WOULD NOT BE ABLE TO MAKE A LIVING.

Certainly, there ARE some dangerS RELATING TO GAMBLING in any point; HOWEVER, I think it SHOULD NOT BE banNED.

As a result, I BELEIVE THAT GAMBLING should be legalized and ALSO SOME limitS SHOULD BE SET TO AVOID ANY DANGEROUS SITUATION TO HAPPEN.

It depends ON you how to PERCEIVE GAMBLING. （これだとこねこの意見になるので、書き換えが必要ね♪）

部分的に修正したわよ♪　これでいいのかなー☆

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ありがとうございます。