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私は賛成です。 それには３つの理由があります。 １つ、横綱はこれまでも数々のトラブルを起してきました。 ２つ、横綱は相撲の中でも最も高いステータスです。 ３つ、相撲は日本の伝統的スポーツです。 以上より、横綱は責任をもってよりきつい厳罰を受けるべきだとも 思います。 スポーツは勝ち負けのみに重きがあるのではなく、 プレーヤー自身に真価が問われるのです！ I agree with this opinion. I have three reasons. One,Mr.Yokozuna has been did many troubles ever before. Two,Sumo is Japanese very cultural famous sports. Three,his status in Sumo is a top. So, I also think he should accepted more severe punishment. Sports is not only worse winning or losting. Player casually must consious of themselves too!
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I agree. There are three reasons why I, too, believe that he should be more severely punished. This is not the first time he's been in trouble like this; in fact, he's been in trouble many many times. Also, not only is he a famous wrestler for Sumo, a prestigious Japanese sport that has had a special place in the hearts of many Japanese people for centuries, but he is also a Yokozuna, the highest status one can get in Sumo. Being such a famous figure who should normally be a role model for others, I believe he deserves a more harsh punishment. After all, in sports, it's not just how well a player does that's important, but also how one behaves in AND outside the games!! チャットとかメール等の為ならこんなので十分（以上）なはずです。ちゃんとしたレポートとかの為だったら書き直したほうがいいですけど。すごくrun-on sentenceが多いので。
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- ocanada
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あ、run-on sentenceって言うのはダラダラとandやso、セミコロン等で文を繋げて一つ一つの文章をめっちゃ長くしてる、若しくは文一個一個が短くてもsoやand等でつなげてるだけの事なんです。 日本語で例えれば、 これは～なので、～なんですけど～と言う事もあって、～は～なので結局は～なんです。 みたいな物です。ｗｗ読みにくいし醜いですよね。だから、ちゃんと書くときは出来るだけそうしないようにする物なんです、本当は。日本の学校で教える程度や友達で話す時などでは気にする人はあまりいないですが。
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教えてくださってありがとうございました!! とっても参考になりました!!
- ocanada
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あ、言い忘れましたけど僕の文では理由を3つではなく2つにしておきました。（2つ目と3つ目を一つの理由にしたので） だから、↓の2個目の文は There are three reasons why...ではなく There are two reasons why...です！
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ありがとうございました＾＾
- rvnz
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I agree with this opinion and there is three reasons for it. First, Yokozuna has been in trouble many times before. Second, Yokozuna is certainly in the highest status in Sumo. Last, Sumo is one of the cultural sports in japan. For these reasons, I think that Yokozuna should take the responsibilities and accept severe punishment. It can also be said that the importance in sports depends on the personality of the player and not the result of winning or losing! こんな感じでどうでしょう。 添削というより書き直しになってしまいましたが； 参考にしていただけると幸いです。
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早い回答ありがとうございます！ うわーうまいですね！！ 見比べて色々と吸収したいと思います!!
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ありがとうございました！ とっても参考になりました！ あ、ところでrun-on sentenceとは日本語でどういう意味ですか？