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質問

中学生です
以下の英文の間違いを厳しく見つけてくれたら嬉しいです
実際に自力で文を作るのが上達への近道かなと思ったので実践しました
時制とかめちゃくちゃだったらすいません（；ω；）
正直、the とかもどこに入れたらいいか分かりません！
長い文になりそうだったのでストーリーも変な所でとまっています；
全部の間違いを指摘するのが面倒だったら１か所でもいいので指摘お願いします！
逆になにか質問があれば答えます。

Today, I got up 9:00 a.m. I slept for ten hours, but I was still sleepy then. I called my friend, Jim as soon as I got up because I promised to call him yesterday, but I forgot. Even though I broke my promise with him, he wasn't angry at all. It's natural for me to get angry. But I said to him ''I'll call you on time when I'll promise you without fail.'' After that I ate breakfast. I laid butter on bread. I love butter the best of all flavors (?). I love milk, too because it goes well with bread. I had to go to school, but I'd rather stay home and take it easy. I went to school on foot in a hurry. I met Kate by chance then. She is smart, and cute as well. To be honest, I wanted to go to school right off, but her story was very long.

回答No.3

noname#183197 · ベストアンサー

補足読みました。

I called my friend Jim as soon as I got up, since I forgot to call him yesterday even though I promised him without fail that I would do so in time.
※without fail はなくてもいいです。

「起きてすぐに友達のジムに電話した。絶対時間通りに電話すると約束していたのに、昨日電話をするのを忘れてしまったから。」

原文から内容を読み取って書き換えましたが、意図した内容になっていなかったらごめんなさい(^^♪

お礼

なるほど（＾＾）
納得できました！

本当にありがとうございます！！

回答No.2

kannazuki123

全体的に良く書けているんじゃないでしょうか。
意味の分からないところは、ほとんどありませんでしたから、
もっと自信を持ってよいと思いますよ！

自然な感じに書き直してみましたので、参考にして下さいね。

I got up at nine o'clock this morning.
I had slept for ten hours, but I was still sleepy.
I called my friend, Jim, as soon as I got up, because
I didn't call him yesterday as I had promised.
Even though I broke my promise with him, he wasn't angry at all.
Still, I promised him, "Next time, I'll call you at the agreed
time without fail."
Then, I had bread and butter for my breakfast.
I prefer butter to jam (?). I like milk, too, because it goes
well with bread. After breakfast, I had to go to school, though
I wanted to stay home and relax.
I was hurriedly walking to school when I ran into Kate.
She is a smart, cute girl. But, she kept talking and talking, and
I wanted to rush off to school, to be honest.

お礼

御丁寧に全文直していただきうれしいです！

やっぱり人に自分の英文を理解してもらえるとうれしいですね（＾＾）
（もちろん完璧ではありませんが；）
もっと自身を持てるように勉強がんばります

ありがとうございます！

回答No.1

noname#183197

とても良くできていますね。全体的に but を多用しているので、 although や though などを使うともっとスムーズになるかもしれません。

Today, I got up 9:00 a.m. Although I slept for ten hours, I was still sleepy. I called my friend Jim as soon as I got up, since I forgot to call him yesterday even though I promised him without fail that I would do so in time. It's natural that he would get mad in this case, but he wasn't angry at all. After that, I ate breakfast. I always eat bread with butter on it. I love butter. Its flavor is best. I love milk too because it goes well with bread. I rather wanted to stay home and relax but I had to go to school. On my walk to school, I met Kate by chance. She is smart and cute, but to be honest, I liked to walk in a hurry rather than listening to her story.

お礼

回答ありがとうございます！

補足

丁寧にありがとうございます！でも、
I called my friend Jim as soon as I got up, since I forgot to call him yesterday even though I promised him without fail that I would do so in time.
この文だけが分かりにくいので訳だけでいいので教えてください！