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TOPIC:日本は食料自給率をあげるべきだ。 Im for this opinion.Japan's self-sufficiency ratio is too low nowadays.It is about 40 ％,which means that Japan is quite dependent on other countries for food.There are mainly two problems. To begin with,if there happens a serious climate change,the price of food rises.Then itwill have a direct impact on food we usually eat,such as rice.When Australia experienced serious lack of rain,the price of wheet rised.Then that in Japan rised,too. Another problem is safety of food.In other countries,harmful substances which are not accepted in Japan can be used.Certainly,polluted crops are usually be got rid of at the customs.However,it sometimes happens that some of them reach kitchen.This is bad for your health. Therefore,I think we have to make efforts to raise self-sufficiency ratio for food. 全部で150語近くあります。長すぎですみません。文法、綴り、論理の面で怪しいところを指摘していただけたら嬉しいです。
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2011people TOPIC:日本は食料自給率をあげるべきだ。 I am for this opinion.Japan's self-sufficiency ratio is too low nowadays.It is about 40 ％,which means that Japan is quite dependent on other countries for food.There are mainly two problems. To begin with,(1)if there happens a serious climate change,the price of food rises.Then it will have a direct impact on food we usually eat,such as rice.When Australia experienced serious lack of rain,the price of wheet rised.Then that in Japan rised,too. Another problem is safety of food. In other countries,harmful substances which are not accepted in Japan can be used. Certainly, (2)polluted crops are usually be got rid of at the customs. However, it sometimes happens that some of them reach kitchen. (3)This is bad for your health. Therefore,(4)I think we have to make efforts to raise self-sufficiency ratio for food. (1)ここは仮定法過去、もしくは仮定法現在を使いましょう。現在形を用いた仮定法というのは、比較的予想が出来る条件の場合に使います。「重大な気候変動」というのは、それが起こるのかどうかは定かではありません。なので、ここでは「比較的ありえない」というのを前提において「仮定法過去」、もしくは「仮定法現在」を用いるべきです。－３ (2)pollited crops are usually be got rid of at the customes.表現がおかしいです。beは不要です。－３ (3)ごまかしちゃいかん！「this」というのは指示語。つまり「some of them」つまり「polluted crops」ですよね？まず、これは複数形なので「these」にしないといけないので－２。また、「汚染された穀物」自体が健康に悪いのではなく、「汚染された穀物を食べること」が健康に悪いといわなければ為りません。そういう意味でごまかすな！です。－１ (4)英作文において「we」などの表現を用いた場合、「一般論」という風に扱われます。「一般論」を「私はおもう」という形はおかしいです。一般論というのは定義がはっきりしたものをいうので、「I think」は不要。－３。また、最後の結論ではあまり「I think」を用いるのを避けましょう。これはあなたの意見に対して、曖昧さを生み出してしまう傾向があります。なので、最後の結論は「～すべきなんだ！」ということ。 ＜全体批評＞ う～ん・・・実際の入試感覚で点数をつけるとしたら・・・１３／２５点ですね。惜しい！英作文の合格点は「６割以上！」だから、１５点は欲しいところ！特に、(2)の部分の減点は少々厳しめにつけさせていただきました。論理的には非常によくかけていると思います。書き方は何の問題もないと思うので、あとは文法やちょっとしたミスを防げれば飛躍的に点数があがるはず！ 具体例を使うタイミングとかは本当にすばらしいです！自信を持って望みましょう！
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日本にいると、日本の状態があたりまえであるかのように思うのだが、だからといって、世界の他の場所でも同じであるとは限らない。 When you are in Japan,you take the japanese society for granted,but it is not necessary that this is the case in other countries. よろしくお願いします
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TOPIC:Japan should open its doors to foreign workers. I don't agree with this opinion.Many countries,say the US and Germany, are relatively open to foreign workers.Such countries insist that Japan should loosen limitation of influx of foreign workers.Certainly,they contribute to lower labor cost.However,there are many problems,such as conflicts of cultures and employment of foreigners. For example in Germany,many people came from other countries,mainly from turkey,to compensate Germany's lack of labor after the world war 2.However,there found conflicts of cultures.Many crimes happend.Besides,in early 1990s,it became difficult for Germans to get job.Foreign workers were regarded as nuisanses. In fact,there is no country that does not have any problems with foreign workers. Therefore,I don't think Japan should open its doors freely to foreign workers. 突っ込みどころ満載ですが…（若者がやりたがらない福祉の仕事なら雇用の点で衝突せずにすみますし）限界です。英語力、英作文力のなさに驚きました(〒_〒)
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独学で英語を勉強している者です。 よろしくお願いします。 中高生向けの英語の問題集に次のような英文が出てきました。 In some countries, for example, people usually don't hold a rice bowl or anything like that in their hands when they are eating. To hold a rice bowl is not good manners in these countries. But in Japan it is good manners. 第2文と第3文において，主語が単数なのに補語が複数であるのはなぜでしょうか。
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・He investigate the ratio of “standard workers” in Japan, and indicating that college graduates are more higher than high school graduates. ・Students who go to university even if a loan is needed is increasing to get into better company. ＜・彼は日本における “standard workers” の比率を調べ、それは大学卒業者の方が高校卒業者よりも高いことを示した。 ・より良い企業に就職するために借金をしてでも大学へ進学するという学生が増えている。＞ こちらの英文を添削してほしいです。 よろしくお願いします。
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テーマは「日本でオリンピックを開催すべきか否か」です。 I think we should invite Olympics to somewhere in Japan. I think it would benefit Japan in some respects. First, holding Olympics is very profitable. Indeed, it would cost us much money, but profit would be larger than it. It is because many foreign people come to japan and spend much money. Moreover if Olympics were been held in Japan, Japanese people could directly see it more easily. When it is held in other countries, most Japanese people can't go, and even if they were able to go,it would cost them too much money. For these reasons, I think inviting Olympics is good for us. 文法のほか、文章構成なども指導していただけると嬉しいです。 あと受験が近くて緊張で体調が悪いです。一言応援メッセージをください！
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またまた添削していただきありがとうございました。話を誤魔化すなというのはそのとおりだと思いました。説明は省略しちゃいけませんね… ありがとうございました！