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大学受験対策の自由英作文なのですが、添削よろしくお願いします。 テーマは「あなたが大事にしているもの」についてです。 I cherish a bag which is a black and expensive one. I found it three years ago,but I had no money to buy it,so I spared money in order to get it. Two weeks after that,I finally bought it and was delighted at it. It has been so tough that it is like a new one now. I wish to have it as long as possicle. では、よろしくお願いします。


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こんな感じでしょうか? I love my black backpack, which was very rare and expensive. I found it at the store three years ago, and I instantly fell in love with the design. Since I didn’t have enough money at that time, I worked so hard to save the money and a few weeks later I finally could buy it. Now I always try to keep it clean as if it’s just bought!



解答ありがとうございます。 SHIBIKIさんの英文を見ると、すらすら読める綺麗な文章で、私の解答はやはり拙い文章に感じられました。 とても参考になりました! 指導して頂いている身で僭越ながら、私の英文で文法的・言い回し的に間違った箇所や、内容はもっとこういう風に書いたほうがいい、というアドバイスを頂ければもっと嬉しかったです。


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