気候変動による生態系への影響と絶滅の危機 -地球温暖化による影響が北極で深-

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高校で資料を参考にして、エッセイを書く課題が出ました。一度書いてみたので添削をお願いします！ ※文章構成(first of all, secondly In conclusion と　最初のパラグラフと最後のパラグラフとの内容が被ること)に関しては学校からの指示なので、そのままでお願いします。 ‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐ People had better be concerned about climatic change. One of the things that are in question most and most influential is global warming. These days, global warming has been serious. If we took preventive measures against global warming thoroughly, we would be in peril of our life. Also the Island whose altitude is low may sink in the sea because the ice in the arctic is malted by rising temperature and sea water. First of all, according to the report from Nasa in 2005, the amount of sea ice that floats in the chilly arctic is much less than what it used to be. This report says that it is probably because of warmer arctic temperature. This thing is so serious. But now global warming has been in progress in spite of the official date like this is going public. Secondly, the report says that the amount of sea ice that floats in the chilly arctic is much less than what it used to be. This report says that it is probably because of warmer arctic temperature. This change may surprise many people even who don’t take interest in global warming. We are not able to keep this the situation any more. In conclusion, we had better think of global warming and need to immediately start working out solutions for this problem. Otherwise, we will really be in peril of our life. ‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐‐ ※念のために言いたいことを大まかに日本語で書いておきます※ ^－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－人々はもっと気候変動について気にかけるべきである。もっとも影響があり問題となっているのが地球温暖化だ。近年、地球温暖化は深刻化してきている。もし私たちが徹底的に地球温暖化を防がなければ、生命の危機に瀕することになるかもしれない。また、海水や気温の上昇により北極の氷が溶け、水面が上昇して海抜が低い島々は海に沈んでしまうかもしれません。　第一に、NASAの2005年に調査によると、「資料抜粋：the amount of sea ice that floats in the chilly arctic is much less than what it used to be. This report says that it is probably because of warmer arctic temperature.」これのことはとても深刻です。しかし今でもこのような調査が公表されているにも関わらず地球温暖化は進行しています。次に、この調査は「資料抜粋each year, during the month of September, the amount of sea ice floating in the Arctic Ocean is typically at its lowest amount for the entire year. That year, and all the way back to 2002, the amount of sea ice has been 20% less than the average amount seen normally between 1979 and 2005.」ということを示しています。この変化は、地球温暖化に興味がない多くの人々でさえも驚かせてしまうかもしれません。私たちはこの状況をこれ以上そのままにしておくことはできないのです。要するに、私たちはもっと地球温暖化のことを考え、この問題について対策を練る必要があります。そうでなければ、本当に命の危険にさらされるかもしれないのです。

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文法だけでなくここはこう言ったほうがいいんじゃない？みたいなのもありました、どうぞ教えてください。 Education System of Two Countries It is the common objective of educational system in any countries to foster its citizens to become productive members of its society. Every country has its own education system. Two countries United States and Japan have also their own education systems. After World War II, the Japanese education system was built based on American's education system, so the education system in the United States and Japan have a lot in common fundamentally. American and Japanese educational principle is similar; however, the entrance processes are quite different. At first glance, pursuing university education of American and Japanese universities appears to be straightforward. The basic system seems to be identical. Both countries have two-year university, four-year university and technical school. Students enter college after they have graduated from high school, or simply demonstrate their ability to get higher education. Students can take any classes that they wish to take and they are free to devote most of their time to education. Both countries put from 6 years to 15 years old children under an obligation to be taken education. Even though American and Japanese university basic system seems to be identical, the entrance processes are vary significantly. In America, compared with Japanese university, it is easy to enter university. Students do not have to take the admission examination for entrance, but all students need is just submit the required documents like high school transcript. So students need to get good grade in high school. When students enter university, they are not required the good academic skills. However, it is difficult to get units and graduate from university, because they have to show their good skills in the class, so not a few students who can’t get the units and it take much time to graduate. In short, students who want to enter American university need to study hard after entering university. On the other hand, at Japanese university, it is difficult to enter university. Students have to take admission examination instead of submitting the required documents to enter. For Japanese universities, it differs from American universities in that you need to take an entrance exam for the specific university. If you pass the exam then your high school grades don’t matter at all. In short, contrary to American university, students who wish to enter Japanese university need to study hard before entering university. To conclude, while basically, American and Japanese education system are similar, the entrance processes to enter university are poles apart.

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北極の海氷についての英文です。 STOCKHOLM (AP) — Arctic ice is melting faster than expected and could raise the average global sea level by as much as five feet this century, an authoritative new report suggests. The study by the international Arctic Monitoring and Assessment Program, or AMAP, is one of the most comprehensive updates on climate change in the Arctic, and builds on a similar assessment in 2005. The full report will be delivered to foreign ministers of the eight Arctic nations next week, but an executive summary including the key findings was obtained by The Associated Press on Tuesday. It says that Arctic temperatures in the past six years were the highest since measurements began in 1880, and that feedback mechanisms believed to accelerate warming in the climate system have now started kicking in. One mechanism involves the ocean absorbing more heat when it's not covered by ice, which reflects the sun's energy. That effect has been anticipated by scientists "but clear evidence for it has only been observed in the Arctic in the past five years," AMAP said. The report also shatters some of the forecasts made in 2007 by the U.N.'s expert panel on climate change. The cover of sea ice on the Arctic Ocean, for example, is shrinking faster than projected by the U.N. panel. The level of summer ice coverage has been at or near record lows every year since 2001, AMAP said, predicting that the Arctic Ocean will be nearly ice free in summer within 30-40 years. 以上です。自分でも一通り訳してはみたのですが、どなたかが訳してくださったものも参考にして、さらによい訳を作りたいと思っています。よろしくお願い致します。

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われわれは表現の自由を当然のものと思ってはならず、それを守るために絶えず戦わなくはならない。 We must not think that freedom of expression is natural. And we must constantly fight to preserve it. その年の11月、彼女は看護師になってイタリアに行き、そこでその戦争で傷ついた人々の世話をした。 She became a nurse and went to Italy, in Novenber of that year. And she took care of the people injured in the war there. 添削お願いします。

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Biodiversityの重要性と、その社会への影響を２００語程度にまとめよと出題され、以下のように書きました。 Biodiversity is important in two respects.. First, biodiversity prevents sudden food crisis. Diversity of a species means that it is strong enough to survive. Suppose that we grow genetically same crops made by the clone technology. If one crop gets ill, the other crops will also get ill because they are genetically the same. This may lead to extinction of the whole species and we will face a world-wide food crisis. Second, biodiversity will leave us the possibility of curing for some serious diseases. Scientists have only succeeded in studying less than one percent of species of plants, animals and insects living on the earth though there are more than 10 million of them. The diversity is so great. But they are on the verge of extinction. We must preserve them because there are possibilities that we will find new kinds of medicine among these unknown species with which we will be able to treat incurable diseases such as cancer, AIDS and so on. We have to prevent these living matters from dying out before we find them. なんか締まらない感じなんですがどうすればいいでしょう?

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In this sense,rice does much better.It contains far less fat than bread, and white rice contains less than one-tenth of the fat in both breads.Protein is a substance our body needs in order to grow and remBesides the mineral above, whole-grain foods have a higher amount of magnesium in brown rice is seven times as much as that in white rice.Whole-wheat bread contains more than three times the amount of it than in white breads.There is also a largeain healty.Both kinds of bread have around four to five times as much protein as both kinds of rice have.

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またタバコの煙に含まれるダイオキシン濃度により環境汚染を汚染したり、タバコの製造に大量の木材が伐採されている。これは環境問題にかけている金額にも関わってくるのではないかと思う。このことに関して色々な意見があるが、実際に採用する価値はあるように思える。 Furthermore, pollution of the environment is caused by dioxin contained in cigarette smoke, and a large amount of woods is cut down to manufacture tobaccos. I think that this will also be related to the amount of money on environmental problem. There are various opinions about this, but it seems to be worth adopting it in fact. ＊ cigaretteを使ったりtobaccoを使ったりしていますが、統一したほうがいいでしょうか？こちらの英文を添削して欲しいです。よろしくお願いします。

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In case you missed the May edition of “Geophysical Research Letters,” an article by five scientists has the backdrop. They analyze the extent of Arctic sea ice each summer since 1953. The computer models anticipated a loss of ice of 2.5 percent per decade, but the actual loss was 7.8 percent per decade — three times greater. The article notes that the extent of summer ice melting is 30 years ahead of where the models predict. Three other recent reports underscore that climate change seems to be occurring more quickly than computer models had anticipated: Science magazine reported in March that Antarctica and Greenland are both losing ice overall, about 125 billion metric tons a year between the two of them — and the amount has accelerated over the last decade. To put that in context, the West Antarctic Ice Sheet (the most unstable part of the frosty cloak over the southernmost continent) and Greenland together hold enough ice to raise global sea levels by 40 feet or so, although they would take hundreds of years to melt. We hope.

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エッセーを書いてみたのですが、自分だとなかなか添削はできないので、どなたか文法、スペル、意味が通っていないなどの間違いがありましたら添削よろしくおねがいします。あともしエッセーのい構成で、ここはこうしたほうが良いんじゃない？みたいなのがありましたら遠慮なくおっしゃってください。　People usually watch TV, internet or magazine commercials without paying a lot of attention to what strategies are used. Logos has been used in advertisements across two centuries to make the content of the advertisement persuasive and to convince consumers that the product is reliable, honest and credible. 1960 DHC and 2006 Clearasil Skin Care Lotion advertisements both used the same marketing strategy- logos; however, the changing attitude about fantasy over the few decades is evident in those two commercials. 　In the two advertisements, both used similar strategies. First, they used logic part of logos to make the advertisement persuasive and whip up audience’s interest or emotion by showing subconscious and concrete data. In the DHC advertisement, two women say, “This is a No.1 sales product in the world!” and introduce some voices of successful users. Also, in the Clearasil advertisement, slogans such as “This is 100% natural!” and “10million people are using this!” are heard. Second, they used attractive male or female models. In the DHC advertisement, two women who have nice skin appeared, and in the Clearasil advertisement, attractive man was acting. 　Although both advertisements used same marketing strategy, they used different way to advertise their products. In the DHC advertisement, they narrowed down the target group to just women who want beautiful and clear skin. Also, they do not use fantasy in a comic book or video game mode. Just two real women appeared in the advertisement. 　Different from the DHC advertisement, Clearasil advertisement narrowed down the target group to men. Also, the man who appeared in the advertisement not only represent concrete data but also explain scientific reasons why the product is extremely effective for the skin. Most different thing is using fantasy. In the Clearasil advertisement, one real man and one unreal woman like anime character appeared and advertised their product. 　To conclude, from old to current advertisements, they used same strategy- logos, but the way of advertising has been changed. Why uses fantasy like anime or game character in advertisement? That is because using anime character in advertisements can make more close to people, and the character has the deep impression in people's mind. Also, it is easily make people associate the character with the products in advertisements. On the whole, it is a trick of advertisements and it seems to be called Image spokesman.

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Systems theory is a fascinating new discipline. By looking at each part of a system and determining the effect it has on other parts, a map of the process can be made. This analysis helps make it clear how changes in one part of the system affect other parts and the system as a whole. A common example now is the melting of ice in the Arctic. If the summer temperature stays under a particular point, the amount of melted ice stays small. However, if the average temperature of the air in the summer is too high, the system might enter a state where all the ice melts. This happens because of a feedback loop: since ice reflects a lot of sunlight away from the Arctic, if there is less ice than usual, then more water will absorb sunlight and warm up. With more warm water present, more ice melts, and more water gets warmed up; this cycle continues, and accelerates. Soon, there is no more ice left. As for the mercury cycle, the ocean methylation process is not completely understood, so we are not yet able to figure out how to prevent mercury from methylating and entering the food chain. Once the process is understood, we hope to be able to control the amount of methylation so as to protect our marine food supply.

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That is still an enormous amount, but it is 10.7 million less than the headline number she heard in the news. ここでの"headline number"の意味合いはなんとなくわかるのですが、適訳が見つかりません。アドバイスお願い致します。

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トルコアイスについての説明を英語ですることになったのですが、英語にはちょっと自信がないので… 詳しい方、添削をお願いします。　This is Dondurma. 　The Turkish ice sold in Japan is called Dondurma. 　　Dondurma is made of sugar and sheep milk and salep , and the taste has vanilla , milk , coffee , chocolate . 　When I eat Dondurma, the Turk prepares the water by all means . 　This is because it prevents that Dondurma is clogged up by water. 　Powder of Dondurma is sold in Turkey and can make Dondurma easily at home. 　It may be said that Dondrums is ice loved by the Turkish nation 　How if I eat , everybody ?

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Many researchers believe that health of polar bears parallels directly with the health of the environment. Scientists are concerned that despite the constant cold in Northern Manitoba, it may not be staying cold long enough to keep the environment stable. In other words, global warming may be affecting the ice patterns, which are critical for the survival of the polar bear. Cam Elliot explains what the situation means for the continued existence of the polar bear. “Over the last 25 years, research conducted by the Canadian Wildlife Service has found about a two-week advancement in spring weather and ice melt,” he reports. “Polar bears are a creature of the sea ice. When they are out on the ice,they are hunting seals. Anything in the global climate that would affect the stability or the length of the time that the ice is on the Hudson Bay or the length of the time that the ice is on the Hudson Bay or the Arctic weters is going to have immediate impact on polar bears.”To state the issues simply and clearly:polar bears need ice, and global warming may be taking it away from them.

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Essayを書きましたので、添削をお願いします。特に、文の構成などにアドバイスをいただけるとうれしいです。テーマは「エネルギー問題について」です Through the Great East Japan Earthquake and the accident of Fukushima NO1 nuclear　power plant, public opinions are tending to not to use nuclear power anymore. Thus, the natural power such as, water, wind and solar are attracted by many people gradually. However, the government is not fully agree with abolishing nuclear power. From my point of view, Japan shouldn't rely on nuclear power anymore. Because of the high energy, nuclear power is too hard to control, and once have a trouble with power plant, it leads to the large amount of people death and illness. What's more, the wastes from nuclear power plant can't throw away everywhere, otherwise those wastes pollute the environment. On the contrary, opponents say, if the nuclear power plant will be abolished, whole Japan will be lack of energy. Therefore, the capital of Japan, Tokyo have to carry out scheduled blackout like last summer. Because The main system in many ways like government and economy are all in Tokyo, so blackout leads to Japan's confusion. As far as I am concerned, Japan use too much energy, and you should save them. Everyone's economy is enough to making up the lack of energy. Besides, you can hope Japanese technology of using natural power. Although the large number of technologies are still not in use now, Japanese technician will discover successful way definitely.

英文エッセイ

こんにちわ。アメリカの語学学校に通う１７歳です。金曜日にエッセイ提出で、一応自分で書いてみたのですが、中卒なのでライティングにあまり自信がありません。英語に詳しい方、ご指摘ください。以下が私が書いた文章です。よろしくお願いします。　　　　　In some countries, most notably in Asia, there is a high degree of loyalty to one company. However, in most European countries and the United States, loyalty to one’s employer is not highly valued; instead it is considered more rational and reasonable for an employee to change jobs whenever it is warranted to achieve the optimal overall career. Both of these positions have advantages and disadvantages. 　　　　　In cultures that value loyalty to the employer, a kind of family relationship seems to develop between employer and employee. It is a reciprocal arrangement which the employer is concerned with assisting the employee to develop to his/her full potential and the employee is concerned about optimizing the welfare of the company. The negative aspect to absolute loyalty to one company is that an employee may stay in one job that he/she has outgrows and may miss out on opportunities to develop in new directions. From the employer’s point of view, the employee may be burdened with employees whose skills no longer match the needs of the company. 　　　　　In cultures in which it is quite acceptable to change jobs every few years, employees can build the career they choose for themselves. They can stay with one company as long as it is mutually beneficial to company and employee. As long as good relationship exists and the employee’s career is advancing at an acceptable pace, the employee can remain with a company. But at any time the employee is free to move to another company, perhaps to achieve a higher position, to move into a new area, or to find a work situation that is more suitable to his/her personality. The disadvantage of this situation is employees tend to move around a lot. 　　　　　Although both these systems have advantages and disadvantages, it is much better for employees have the opportunity to move from job to one another if it is necessary to have a better career.

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英文和訳お願いします。 In general, my music is just quiet because it’s not the kind of music that is supposed to be loud, there is not really anything more to it than that. It would be pretty silly to blast strings and piano at 105db. こちらなのですが、英文和訳をお願いします。どうもthere is not really anything more to it than that.のあたりが不明で・・・。

英文をお訳し願います。

A world of craft production and barter would have little use for the quantifier’s tools, and would be impervious to them. It has been urged that accounts have less to do with representing conditions than with guiding behavior in large firms. This is undoubtedly so, though there is more than a hint here of a false dichotomy. Numbers that have no credibility as truth claims will be less effective also at projecting power and coordinating activity. 上記英文中の，It has been urged that accounts have less to do with representing conditions than with guiding behavior in large firms.をお訳し願います。

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A large amount of waste such as plastic ones that was used to “Dead Whale”, and invisible finely divided material is drifting in the sea. It has been concerned to bad effect on ecology of sea by these harmful trash. 「海には"dead whale"(アートの作品名)で使われたようなプラスチックのゴミのほか、目に見えない微細な物質も大量に漂っており、そうした有害なゴミが海の生態系への悪影響を与えることも懸念されています。」＊日本語が長かったので、英語で言いやすくするために文章を区切りました。こちらの英文の添削をお願いします。

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エッセイを書きました、添削をお願いします。 With the development of information technology, more and more people get easier ways to access valuable information than before. TV, radio, newspaper and Internet are main tools that you can get Information in every seconds and minutes. However, the increasing of information quantity bring about the increasing of fake information. Internet is often thought by people as a mother of fake news, and what TV or radio broadcasting is truth. But, because of TV and radio didn't fully broadcast the truth witch Tokyo electric power company had made last year, people have hesitated eyes to watch the TV news recently. What's more, newspaper also have problems. For example, an article about interviews, under the limited of latter number, it ofter cut the interviewee's words. Therefore, people are easier to misunderstand what the article indicating. From my point of view, every information senders should change their behavior. On the one hand, they mustn't send information with someone's private opinion. On the other hand, each senders have to choose information which people are really desiring.

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タイトル「中学生が携帯電話を持つことのに対してあなたはどう思いますか？」に対し私は中学生が携帯電話を持つことに反対であるという意見で英文を書きました。しかし、英語そのものが苦手なため毎回ひどい(文法がメチャクチャ・・・)英文を書いてしまいます。そのため英文を見ていただき、直した方が良いところなどを教えてください。よろしくお願いします。『本文↓』私は中学生が携帯電話を持つことに反対です。まず初めに、携帯を持っている子供はたくさんのことを失います。たとえば、私はニュースなどで最近の子供はコミニュケーション能力が減ってきているということをたびたび耳にします。私はコミニュケーション能力が減少する原因は携帯電話にあると思います。 I am against for Junior high school student having mobile phone. First of all, a lot of lose thing that child having mobile phone. For example, I’ve often heard on the news that recent young people’s communication ability has been decreasing. I think that the cause of young people’s communication ability decline is mobile phone. その理由は携帯電話を使ったコミュニケーションは相手の表情が分からないからです。加えて携帯電話に依存することは学生の勉強時間減少にもつながってしまうからです。 The reason is that the communication by the mobile phone can’t understand other party’s expression. In addition, depending on the mobile phone leads to decrease in the study time of the student. 第二に携帯電話を持っていることによって起こる被害もあります。たとえば、ネットを使ったイジメです。ネット上では相手の顔が分からないため、書きたいことが書けるのです。加えて、悪徳サイトなどからの違法な金額請求などがあります。つまり、お金の管理能力がほとんどない中学生段階には、携帯を持たせるべきではありません。 Secondly there is damage to happen because it has the mobile phone. For example, it is bullying that uses the net. Since other party’s face is not understands on the net, it can be written to want to write. In addition, there is an illegal amount of money claim by the corruption site. Therefore, it should not have the mobile phone at the stage of the junior high school student who doesn’t have the ability to manage of money so much. しかしながら、携帯を持っている中学生が多いのも事実です。親の考えからすると、私は子供の身を心配して持たせているのではないかと思います。しかしながら、その親が与えた携帯電話によって犯罪に巻き込まれる可能性も大いにあるのです。 However, it is true that there are a lot of junior high school student who have mobile phone. Judging from parenthood, I think that parents worry about child’s body, and are giving the child mobile phone. However there is a highly possibility be caught up in a crime by the mobile phone which a parent gave. 次に、携帯電話を持っている子供は直接会って話すより、携帯を使って話す方が気軽に話すことができると言います。しかし、電話やメールを安易な気持ちで使っていると、時に相手を不快な気持ちにすることがあります。なぜなら、相手の表情が分からないからです。　　　　　　　　　 Next, the junior high school student who has mobile phone says that it can speak more readily talking by using the mobile phone than meets directly talking. However, calling and e-mailing carelessly can sometimes make others uncomfortable. That is because can’t understand each other’s expression. そのうえ、ほとんどの中学生にとって携帯は連絡の手段というよりも、ゲーム機になっています。実際、授業を聞かないで携帯をいじっている生徒がたくさんいます。これまで述べてきたように、携帯には危険がたくさん潜んでいます。つまり、私は中学生が携帯を持つことに反対です。 Then, the mobile phone becomes are game machine rather than the contact method for most junior high school student. Therefore there are a lot of students who fiddle with the mobile phone without listening to class. It follows from what has been said thus far that a lot of danger lurking mobile phone. In conclusion, I am against for junior high school student having mobile phone.

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