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こんばんは。前回お聞きするの忘れたんですが、haroharo815さんは何歳の方ですか？それによってあまり難しい単語は避けた方がいいのかなぁっと思ったので・・・ でも前回に比べて、感情表現を入れられててとてもよくなったと思います。接続詞だけじゃないですが、一文をもう少し長くできればもっとよくなるはずです。 >I met Japanese traveler. I knew her in the internet. 例えばこの分は関係代名詞whom(最近は話し言葉ならwhoの方が自然です)一文にしてみるとか。 I met a Japanese traveler who I had got to know in the internet. >We went to Yosemite National Park CA. I left 8:00 arrived 15:00. We ate late lunch at Happy burger shop. The shop seems to be the American west restaurant ここも We departured to Yosemite...at 8am. But we arrived there at 3pm, so I had late lunch at Happy burger shop which looked like a Western restaurant. (Western だけで“アメリカ西部の”と言う意味もあります) ４文が二文になって、スッキリしました。 >I ate turkey burger. I t was delicious. But of course it ‘s big! I ordered a turkey burger, which... but... >We went to recommend Glacier Point. We watched sun set. Then,Many people has gathered. and Volunteer staff started explaining. Today was Full moon. We watched to get moon when we heard the shout of joy. It was one of event. この辺はちょっと分かりづらいけど・・・ people has gatheredは必ず過去形。 Today was Full moonはharoharo815さんがプレゼンするときが満月ではないから、「そのとき満月だった」 It was one of event.はイベントの一つと言うことでイベントは複数形。 We went to Glacier Point to see sun set. When many people gathered, a volunteer staff started to explain (何の？). Three days→(旅の)三日目=第三番目の日third day >I think it’s big park. They can’t watch a day. I think, the park was too big for us to see around in one day. (文法的には,入れると間違いですが口語なので) >And then we return to Santa monica. However, came back there midd night. I was very very tired. 「私たちがサンタモニカに戻ってきたときには、もう真夜中だった。だから目茶苦茶疲れた。」このように Whenとalredyを使って言ったほうがいいでしょう。 >Thank you for your driving この場合のyouはプレゼンを聞いている聴衆を指します。なのでI thank (…) for (…). です。 あえて、前文は直していません。何か分からなければ補足してください。
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