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旅のプレゼンをするのですが、アドバイス＆ 添削をお願いします。 Day 3 We went Yosemite National Park CA again. I think it’s big park. They can’t watch a day. We watched “ big tree” aun Yosemite full. And then we return to Santa monica. However, came back there midd night. I was very very tired.but Thank you for your driving. Day 4 I’ve wanted to go the J. Paul Getty Museum. I took big blue bus at St,transfer to talk the No bus and took Tram. I took part in the guide tour in pavilion. This museum is what Paul Getty who was the king known oil manage it. There are a lot of café and garden, it’s very nice! I love museum. I went to The Los Angeles County Museum of Art, LACMA,too. I went out for dinner with my friend who like in down town. She is very cute. I want to talk more with her. Day 5 I visited to watch Hollywood sign in Hollywood. I took one station by subway. So,I went to Universal studio. I was surprised because there are a lot of moves studios. I took part in studio tour. I enjoyed a lot of attractions. The Special Effets attraction is how the special effects for Universal’s biggest movies were made! The Mummy the ride is rollercoaster. Back draft,Terminator,Back to the future, Shrek and Water world are the same as Japan. I felt uneasy because I had go to home late.But it was Ok. There were a lot of people in the bus more than I thought it.
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前の話題を拝見していなかったので検索さしていただきました。 http://oshiete1.goo.ne.jp/kotaeru.php3?q=2372884 ここでも言われていますが、接続詞を多用せず、一文を長くするようにすると良いのではないでしょうか。 文頭を接続詞で始めず、接続詞で文をつないで、ぶつ切り短文にしないように。 と自分は先生に言われました....(^^; 発表をしたわけじゃないんですけどね。 We watched “ big tree” aun Yosemite full. And then we return to Santa monica. However, came back there midd night. こういうところ。 Andは不要だと思います。 それと、 And then we return to Santa monica.とHowever, came back there midd night.の意味がつながっていないような感じがしますが・・・ 『私たちはサンタモニカに戻った。しかし、そこに戻ったのは夜中だった』 しかしながら、では意味がつながらないと思います。 私たちは夜早いうちにサンタモニカに帰りたかったが、しかしながら夜中になってしまった、のような場合なら「しかし」でつなげますが。 また、came back の主語が抜けてます。 続いた一文で主語が変わらないならwe抜いていいんだと思いますが、切れてるともう一度weが要るのでは？ それと、文章として書く場合はあまりit'sのように省略しないほうが良いのではないでしょうか。 They can’t watch a day. 一日では見切れないほど大きいということを言いたいのだろうと日本語ネイティブの私には理解できるのですが、英語的にはどうなのでしょうか。 私もそういうのがよく判らないのですけれどね(^^; 自分だったら違う書き方をします。 ・・・・・と思って前の話題をよく見たら、こういうことの指摘がちゃんと付いてるじゃありませんか？？？ No.2へのアドバイス、まだ見ていないのですか？ それじゃあ添削もらっても生かせませんよ～～
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なんとなく、接続詞とかうまく使えないので、添削してください。 お願いします。 I met Japanese traveler. I knew her in the internet. Next day We went to Yosemite National Park CA. I left 8:00 arrived 15:00. We ate late lunch at Happy burger shop. The shop seems to be the American west restaurant. I ate turkey burger. I t was delicious. But of course it ‘s big! We went to recommend Glacier Point. We watched sun set. Then,Many people has gathered. and Volunteer staff started explaining. Today was Full moon. We watched to get moon when we heard the shout of joy. It was one of event. Three days We went Yosemite National Park CA again. I think it’s big park. They can’t watch a day. We watched “ big tree” aun Yosemite full. And then we return to Santa monica. However, came back there midd night. I was very very tired.but Thank you for your driving.
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旅のプレゼンをするのに、いい英訳教えて下さい。 添削おねがいします。 I talk about my summer vacation. I departure August 7 from Kansai airport to San Francisco. I used UA airline 15:25. I Transferred from San Francisco to LA. I arrived at 9:15 at San Francisco. But the passport control was very crowded. I spend during one hour.] And I pick up my baggage and I left it again. And then I cheak in again. I had only 15-minute.but I don’t know gate No. I went to watch Monitor.I run to gate. I got it. I was relieved. However, the airplane was a trouble. I heard information broadcasting was waiting 3 hours . Maybe. Some passenger got off. I waited a hour after that, I left. I arrived at LA. But I didn’t know where I picked up my baggage. I was looking for it a few times. After that I got it . I took to call door to door shuttle bus. I went to Santa Monica. I stayed for a week. I went to watch Santa maniac pier. On the way , There was information center. I got some map. There were a lot of information center. And I went to best big street in Santa monica”3th St Promenade”
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今度英語で発表することになったのですが、一応考えたのですが自信が無いので添削をお願いします。 Good afternoon everyone. My name is ○○ and today I am going to talk about my favorite trip. This year I went to Malaysia with my friends. Malaysia is a country near the equator. Everyday the weather is very nice so there was very hot. But I enjoyed this trip and want to go to Malaysia again. I will tell you about three reasons why this was my favorite trip. First, Malaysian food was very delicious. There are many races so we can eat various food such as Indian and Chinese and so on. I was so happy to eat Nyonya food. Nyonya food is mixing Malaysian food and Chinese food. Malaysian food taste mostly spicy but everything was very delicious. Second, Malaysia has many famous historic building. I went to Kuala Lumpur and Malacca. I went to tour the Twin-Tower and the Blue Mosque. Twin-Tower is the third highest around the world. In Malacca, I rode a trishaw. Trishaw is like "Zinrikishya". It looks beautiful and the view of outside is wonderful. Finally, I went to Spa. Malaysia is famous for Spa so Malaysian people often reserve the Spa. To my surprise, there is a bath with a lot of flowers. the massage make me feel very comfortable and happy. In short, this was a great trip. if you think to go to foreign countries, I want you to go to Malaysia. I think you will surely be a wonderful trip. おかしければ文章自体を変えてもらってもかまいません。 添削よろしくお願いします。
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