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英語が非常に苦手なものです（泣）明日英語のスピーチがあるのですが、時間がないので助けてほしいです！よろしくお願いします！！

英文：I love a trip. I tell that I went to Fukushima for snowboarding with a friend the other day.
I got on a night coach from night of January 17 and went to the Daira, Adachi plateau of Fukushima. When it arrived at the inn, it was about 4:00 of the morning. The feeling was excited, but I fell asleep once and I got up for 8 carrier 30 minutes of the morning and went to the slope by bus.
When I arrived at the slope, one area was very clean by snow. I changed into a wear at once and went to be slippery. I did not have experience of the snowboarding so far, and this time was the first challenge. I had there was a good child to a friend, and the child teach it from the beginning. I fell down first and. However, I got possible to glide alone while I slipped a lot. When I got possible to glide, I was very glad. It was fearful to step on the lift, but got possible to get on a lift first. I want to thank a friend.
　I entered the hot spring at night. I have a feeling that a tired body softened by the effect of the hot spring. It was very comfortable. The supper ate sukiyaki. Vegetables and meat were very delicious.
　I gathered in one room together and played a game while eating a cake and talked afterwards. It was the future and talked about a thing of the love, an interesting thing in various ways. It was good to be able to do a deep talk.
I made a tour of Fukushima on the second day. I walked the neighborhood and took a photograph with a digital camera. There were footbathing and a lake and a Shinto shrine in the neighborhood of the inn. Powdery snow fell, and the circumference was surrounded in the silver world and was very beautiful when I took a walk through a lake on the way.
And I returned to the house on the night coach again.
I became the very good memory. I want to do a lot of trips from now on. I go to the land and want to watch various things in spite of being a feeling with skin.
Thank you.

日本語：私は旅行が大好きです。こないだ友達と福島にスノボーに行った時の話をします。
私は１月１７日の夜から夜行バスに乗り、福島の安達太良高原に行きました。宿に着いたときは朝の４時頃でした。気持はわくわくしていましたが、一旦眠りにつき、朝の８持３０分に起床してバスでゲレンデに向かいました。
ゲレンデに着いたとき、辺りは一面雪でとてもきれいでした。早速ウエアに着替え、滑りに行きました。私は今までにスノボーの経験がなくて、今回が初挑戦でした。友達に上手な子がいてその子に一から教えてもらいました。最初は転んでばかりでした。しかし、たくさん滑っているうちに一人で滑れるようになりました。滑れるようになった時はとても嬉しかったです。最初はリフトに乗ることも怖かったのですが、リフトにも乗れるようになりました。私は友達に感謝したいです。
　夜は温泉に入りました。疲れた体が温泉の効果によって和らいだ気がします。とても気持ち良かったです。夕飯はすきやきを食べました。野菜やお肉がとてもおいしかったです。
　その後はみんなでひとつの部屋に集まり、お菓子を食べながらゲームをしたり、語ったりしました。将来のこと、恋愛のこと、面白かったことなど色々な話しをしました。深い話ができてよかったです。
二日目は福島めぐりをしました。近辺を歩いてデジカメで写真を撮りました。宿の近くには足湯や湖や神社がありました。途中、湖を散策していると、粉雪が降ってきて周りが銀世界に包まれてとても綺麗でした。
そしてまた夜行バスに乗り、家に帰りました。
とてもいい想い出になりました。私はこれからもたくさん旅をしていきたいです。その土地へ行って肌で感じながら色々なものをみていきたいです。
ありがとうございました。

回答No.1

seegrammar · ベストアンサー

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I love traveling. Today, I'm going to talk about my trip to Fukushima. I went to Fukushima for snowboarding with my friend.
I got on the night coach at night of January 17 and went to the Daira, Adachi plateau of Fukushima. When we arrived at the inn, it was about 4:00 in the morning. Although we were very excited, I fell asleep for a while. I got up at 8:30 and went to the slope by bus.
When I/we arrived at the slope, all area I could see was covered by wonderful and beautiful snow. I changed into a wear quickly and started snowboading. I hadn't had any experience of snowboarding at that time. Therefore it was my first challenge. My friend is very good at snowboarding, and he taught me from A to Z(/from the beginning). I fell down many times. However, Afterwards, I got used to it and I could glide alone. The moment I could glide, I was very glad. It was fearful to step on the lift, but it didn't take much time before I managed to get on a lift. I really want to thank my friend for helping me.
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