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エッセイを書きました、添削をお願いします。 With the development of information technology, more and more people get easier ways to access valuable information than before. TV, radio, newspaper and Internet are main tools that you can get Information in every seconds and minutes. However, the increasing of information quantity bring about the increasing of fake information. Internet is often thought by people as a mother of fake news, and what TV or radio broadcasting is truth. But, because of TV and radio didn't fully broadcast the truth witch Tokyo electric power company had made last year, people have hesitated eyes to watch the TV news recently. What's more, newspaper also have problems. For example, an article about interviews, under the limited of latter number, it ofter cut the interviewee's words. Therefore, people are easier to misunderstand what the article indicating. From my point of view, every information senders should change their behavior. On the one hand, they mustn't send information with someone's private opinion. On the other hand, each senders have to choose information which people are really desiring.
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As the information technology develop, more and more people are getting easier access to valuable information than before. TV, radio, newspapers and or internet are the main tools that you can earn information in every seconds and minutes. However, as the number of information increase, the number of fake information are increasing as well. The internet is often thought to be "the mother of fake news", and that what Tv or radio is broadcasting is more accurate. But because sometimes Tv and the radio aren't broadcasting the full and or true information to the public, like the Tokyo electric power company have done last year, people have hesitated to watch TV news. Similarly, there are problems with the newspapers as well. For an example, because there are limited amount of letters for the writers to write, often, some of the interviewees' words are being cut off. As a result, it is easier for the readers to misunderstand about what the articles are actually indicating. In my opinion, every information senders should change their behavior. They shouldn't send any information that includes someone's private opinion and also, they should be choosing information that people are really desiring.
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