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「父は昔、テーブルマナーに厳しかったが、現在は注意しなくなった。」という内容です。
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　My father would often say to me, “Table manners are important for you.”
When I was a child, my father was strict on table manners.
He was always stern with me, but he was especially fastidious about table manners.
For example, he said, “Don’t put your elbow on the table.”or “Don’t speak while eating anything.”
These examples are general table manners.
That is why he used to make a big fuss over my table manners, every time I ate.

　Furthermore, My father was pedantic about even trivial matters.
For instance, he said, “Don’t leave even a single grain.”
This was really difficult for me.
When I finished eating, I had to show my rice bowl to my father, because he wanted to check if I had eaten every grain of rice. If hadn't, I had to eat again.
This bothered me, but I now realize that eating even the last grain of rice was to show my respect for a person who had cooked for me.

　I hated such my father when I was a child.
However, as I got older, he no longer told me about my table manners.
Probably, this was because he could not find any faults in my table manners which I must have improved since.
Now, I can understand his strictness on table manners.
Mealtimes are not only the time when we eat something but also the time when we can enhance friendship with someone.
Good table manners make the other feel good, but bad manners hurt their feelings.
Therefore table manners are very important.

　Thanks to my father, I don’t have any problems about them.
These days, parents are not strict on table manners.
However, I think that parents should show good table manners to their children.
I want to be a father who is strict on table manners like my father in the future.

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noname#202629 · ベストアンサー

My father often said to me, “Table manners are important for you.” When I was a child, my father was strict on table manners.

He was always stern with me; he was especially fastidious about the manners. For instance, he said “Don’t put your elbow on the table.” or “Don’t speak while eating.” These are the examples of general table manners that he used to make a big fuss every time I ate dinner.

　Furthermore, my father was pedantic about even trivial matters. For instance, he said, “Don’t leave even a single grain.” This was really difficult for me. When I finished eating, I had to show my rice bowl to my father, because he wanted to check if I had eaten every single grain of rice. If hadn't, I had to eat all left over. This bothered me, but I now realize that finishing the last grain of rice was to show my respect for a person who had cooked for me.

　I hated such a (myでも正しかもしれませんが・・) father when I was a child. However, as I got/had gotten older, he no longer corrected my table manners. Probably, this was because he could not find any faults of my manners which might have been improved since my childhood. Now, I can understand his strictness on the table manners. Mealtimes are not only the time when we eat something but also the time when we enhance friendship with someone.　Good table manners make others feel good, but bad manners may hurt their feelings. Therefore it is very important to have the good manners.

　Thanks to my father, I don’t have any problem(s) on it. In these days, parents are not strict on table manners. However, I think that parents should show good manners to their children. I want to be a father like my father who is strict on table manners in the future.