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質問

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問い　
‘An education changes your mirrors into windows’ .Explain what this quote means.

答案
This quote means that education give us a different viewpoint that helps us to think widely.
The mirrors imply a limited world where we can look only ourself.
And the windows imply a widely viewpoint which we can look around the world.
If we get a good education,we would see things objectively and correctly.
But if we couldn’t get enough education,we would be a person who has a narrow vision.

So this quote teaches us the importance of education.

拙い英文だと思いますが何卒よろしくお願いします。

回答No.2

Nakay702

以下のとおりお答えします。
内容には立ち入らず、形式面（文法）のみ添削いたします。

＞This quote means that education give us a different viewpoint that helps us to think widely.
（「引用語句」は普通quotationとします。gives：３単現の‐sにご注意。）
⇒This quotation means that education gives us a different viewpoint that helps us to think widely.

＞The mirrors imply a limited world where we can look only ourself.
（～selfの複数形は、～selvesとなります。）
⇒The mirrors imply a limited world where we can look only ourselves.

＞And the windows imply a widely viewpoint which we can look around the world.
（widelyは副詞。ここは形容詞の比較級widerとするのがいいでしょう。「それでもって〔世界を見渡すことができる〕」は、with which we can look around the worldまたはwhich we can look around the world withとします。）
⇒And the windows imply a wider viewpoint with which we can look around the world / which we can look around the world with.

＞If we get a good education,we would see things objectively and correctly.
（カンマのあとは１字分あけます。）
⇒If we get a good education, we would see things objectively and correctly.

＞But if we couldn’t get enough education,we would be a person who has a narrow vision.
（上に同じく、カンマのあとは１字分あけます。we〔複数〕に対応して、その続きはpersons who have ～とします。）
⇒But if we couldn’t get enough education, we would be persons who have a narrow vision.

＞So this quote teaches us the importance of education.
⇒So this quotation teaches us the importance of education.
（「引用語句」は、〔口語でquoteと言うことはありますが〕、ここでは冒頭と同じくquotationとするのがいいでしょう。quoteは通常動詞として用いられます。）

回答No.1

SPS700

文１
　give を gives 　に
文２
　look only を look at only に
文４
　a をとる
文５
https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/vision