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一橋 2009 Write 120 to 150 words of English about the topic below. A sense of humour is one of the most important things in life. I'm in favor of the idea that a sense of humour is one of the most important things in life. Surely, some people say that even if a person who has it, no difficult problems will be solved, so there is no point having it. In my opinion, however, it is very important for all people and in a lot of situations ,especially in difficult situations,to have it. People tend to be nervous when they face difficult situations, and no good ideas will be come up with unless they are nervous. However, what if there is a person who has a sense of humour? He would be likely to make nervous people relax by using it. By doing so, people could make the best of their power. That is why I agree with the idea. 自分の意見と反対の意見をつくるときに「自分の意見→反対の意見」としたため、若干の理由説明の弱さを自分で感じるのですがどうでしょうか。 また、a sense of humour を途中まで代名詞 it を用いてたのですが、少し a sense of humour の意の it を使わなくなったので 再びa sense of humour と書きました。 この場合は少し距離(?)があいていても it と表現しても問題ないのでしょうか? 回答よろしくお願いします。



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ヒトは苦境ではナーバスになりアイデアも出にくいものだ。 そこにユーモアのセンスのあるヒトが居ればなごませることができる。 という展開だと、「ユーモアセンスの持ち主自身が苦境に陥ったとき」という状況を解決できていないし、ユーモアキャラの登場頼みであって「誰にとっても重要だ」ということを説明していません。 「そういうヒトがいればいい」という主張にしかなっていないのです。 英語的には"no good ideas will be come up with unless they are nervous."というのが否定+否定で変。itについては距離があきすぎると判断したらリフレッシュして再度書いておくのがいいと思います。



なるほど、おっしゃる通りです。いわれてみればというやつですね。 自分で書いて見直す分にはまったく問題ない文に見えたのですが、これは大幅減点ですね・・・。 以降は気をつけます。 また機会があればよろしくおねがいします、回答ありがとうございました。


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