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英作文の添削をお願いします

非常に拙い文章ですみません。 明らかにヘンなところだけでもOKですので、添削していただければ助かります。 ここはこう言った方がかっこいい!とかも嬉しいです。 私としては特に、「この状態では完璧に仕事をこなすことができないと思い」のところが不安です。 このままでは「仕事を全くこなすことができない」にとれませんか? I had learned Italian language in Italy before. After I have returned to Japan in 2007, I worked in an office where I helped candidates who want to study various arts in Italy. For this work, I could use mainly Italian language to communicate with staffs of the art school in Italy, but then it was also necessary writing and sometimes also speaking English because of various nationalities of candidates and students. Since I had learned English at university I can use it anyway. But I think that I couldn’t be useful perfectly in this situation so I left my job. Then I looked for other jobs which proper to me, but in Japan many works which are related to Italy require also ability of English. For this reason I decided to learn it seriously. I believe learning English will be much help for me.

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I [studied] the Italian language in Italy before. After [my return] to Japan in 2007, I worked in an office where I helped candidates who want[ed] to study various arts in Italy. For this work, I could use mainly Italian to communicate with [the] staff of art school[s] in Italy, but then it was also necessary [to] writ[e] and sometimes also [to] speak English because [there were] candidates [from various countries]. [I studied English at a Japanese] university, but I [did not think my English was good enough for the] situation so I left [the] job. Then I looked for other jobs which [appeared more suitable for] me, but in Japan many works [dealing with] Italy require also ability [to use] English. For this reason I decided to learn it seriously. I believe learning English will be [very helpful to] me. でしょうかね。  ご心配の箇所は「私は日本の大学で英語を勉強しましたが、この状況では、私の英語は十分でないと思いました」になります。「仕事を全くこなすことができない」にはなりません。お考えと違った訳になっていたら、おっしゃってください。

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早速の回答ありがとうございます! 訂正箇所の一つ一つに納得しました。 心配していた箇所も、最も私が言いたかったことを的確に表現して いただいて、ただただ感謝です。 ここに書かれていることは全て実際の私の状況です。 私もSPS700さんのように英語を操れるようになるよう、頑張って勉強します。 本当にありがとうございました。

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