海外文通をしているのですが,英文の添削をお願いします!!

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海外文通をしているのですが,英文の添削をお願いします!!

The New Years, I went to 〇〇(場所名) with my family.We looked at sunrise there.
It was very beautiful！

I was surprised, because The New Years of Japan reflected TV of Sri Lanka.
(「スリランカで日本のお正月の様子がテレビに映っていたと聞いて,びっくりしました」はこれで良いんですか？)
And how about your New Years？

Now this time, I send you a MD that when I belong to a wind instrument music club at high school.
Do you have a MD player？
If you don't have, I'll send you a CD next time.

I play the trumpet.
Do you hear my sounds？

My father and my mother are 〇〇 years old.
My father is a 〇〇(職名) and my mother is a 〇〇.

I have precious friends too.
I feel happy when I play with them.

Recently I feel fun when I look over many countrys.
I'd like to know more Sri Lanka.
(moreの位置あってますか？)

What your country's mother tongue do you speak？

Why do you start this letter？

お願いします！

回答No.1

tommyupper · ベストアンサー

こんにちは。一応手直ししましたが、手紙の背景があまり分からなかったので、分かる範囲で予測しました（笑）。
ちなみに、これは手紙全文ですか？だとすると、所々、話が飛んだりしていて意味が伝わりにくい箇所があります。あと始まりや終わりの言葉も必要です。

On the New Years day, I went to (場所名) with my family and saw a beautiful sunrise there.

I was surprised to know that Sri Lankan TV broadcasted about the Japanese New Years day.

How was your New Years day?

Attached to this letter is a MD (Mini Disc) containing the performances from my school wind-instrument band. I play trumpet in the band. Could you hear my instrument in the MD? By the way, do you have a MD player? If you don't, I'll send you a CD version next time.

My father and my mother are 〇〇 years old.
My father is a 〇〇(職名) and my mother is a 〇〇.

I have close friends, too.
I feel happy when I hang out with them.

As I was exploring many countries, I became more passionate about Sri Lanka. I really enjoy researching many countries and their cultures.

What is your mother tongue and what is the common language spoken in your country?

Why did you start sending letters to me?

お礼

すみません(^^;
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英訳助かりました！ありがとうございます!!