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お願いします 下記内容どなたか添削いただけませんでしょうか（内容ではなく文法を）、よろしくお願いします What is the economic system in one country you know? In Japan, we have reliable economic system. For example, Food, Food factory is heavily regulated by government. They are checked their sanitary conditions thoroughly. If factory was poor hygiene situation, Consumer might eat bad food. Therefore, Government checks them out without notice and they try to protect our life. However, Government check system was nearly-defunct few years before. They check it out regularly for the public; in fact they just flip through the document and see their assembly line only superficially. Consequently, it given rise to food industry’s moral degeneration such as doctor production date, poor hygiene situation, mislabeled food, polluted food. Many companies were laid open. Consumers angry at their sloppy management and government’s superficial research but changed low more tighten and enacted whistle-blower immunity bill. And now Government regulates the quality of food and lots of product thoroughly. Bad happen lead to good economic system.
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内容ではなく文法をというご希望ですが、内容的に整合性があって初めて、文法がそれに伴って正しく使われているかどうかがわかります。なので完全に二つを離して考えることは不可能です。 比較的わかりやすい間違いについて・・ １．文の主語を見直してください。単数なのか、複数なのか。それにともない動詞も変わってくるはずです。複数の単語を並べてありますが、それらがすべて主語ならば、andなどで結ばなければ意味を成しません。 (例）Food, Food factory is 両方主語なら、Food ○○○ food factory 何かが必要です。 ２．代名詞の使い方を考えてください。 They、their、itなどを使う場合は、それが何を指すのかはっきりしていない限り使うべきではないというのが、英語の大原則です。残念ながらそこがわかりづらいです。 (例）They are checked their sanitary conditions このtheyは、何を指しますか？ 前の文のfactoryもgovernmentも単数なのでいきなりtheyからはじめられてもつながりません。 theirは何を意味しますか？ （Theyと同様の理由です） 読み手がこれだろうと想像してくれることを期待してはいけません。 ３．時制をチェック 現在形、過去形など時制がバラバラです。起こってることなのは過去なのか、今なのか、それとも将来起こりうることなのか、もう一度ご自分の考えを見直されてから書かれることをお勧めします。
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細部に問題ありです。 文法的にもですが、構成をよく考案してから書いたほうがいいです。 文法的な課題は非常に基礎的なので、もう一度見直してください。 ただ書いただけ、という印象がぬぐえません。
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